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I want to be more

why can't he see
can't he see that i really do
that i am not kidding
that i wanted him
and he thinks of me as
afriend but  i want to
be more more then that
why can't he  see that
i like  him so much
that i am not  just a  little girl
i am more  a person
with feeling  and  i want
to be  more then that
just because i am young  does
not mean i  don't  know what love means
you did not to long  ago

what do u think?

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  • ChemicallyEmilie
    October 27, 2008
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    awwwww taylor this is soooooooo good!!
    i think you did an amazing job on this.
    - em