The pain only hurts when your breathing;
only weighs on your chest when it's rising;
only clenches your lungs while they're filling -
your heart only breaks when it's beating.
The fear only stabs while your bleeding;
only shows itself when you're hiding;
only standing reveals your legs shaking-
though pushed, you're fighting the falling.
The mind only remembers when thinking;
only aching to wake while you're sleeping;
only when ears hear are words replaying -
your dreams only die when your dreaming.
The tears only burn and aren't streaming;
only your eyes feel the droplets brimming;
only inside - not down your cheeks slipping -
perhaps that means your heart is healing.
Author notes
You are always breathing. Your chest is always rising. Your lungs are always filling. Your heart is always beating.
You see the pattern I set for the entire poem. What I was working off of.
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An excellent sentiment and well written.
Happy trails.
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Great write. I really like the format and pattern. Very, very nice. It makes you think. :]
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That's what I like to do. make people think.
Thanks for your comment, much appreciated!
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I really really like this poem. I can relate on so many levels. This is really great!
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Thank you so much! That is what I want - to reach someone, to touch them...makes it more personal than just being 'a good write'.
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Yeah it definently did. Good job!
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Oh my God!
your right, i just came to this one and i felt exactly how you felt when you read my, this is a lovely write, and i am glad i came to read your poem, well done Rachel!! your awesome!!
Blessings
Rend
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thx Rend...haha...I appreciate it...!
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Is this a test?
Time is what is involved here. It is the measurement of motions of material things (i.e. earth's rotation and orbit of the sun). This is the natural. Spirit is supernatural (i.e. feelings as love, hate, fear). Do you think this physical life (matter in motion - Thomas Hobbs) is a test to get into a world in spiritual dimensions where total trust is required and it is practiced here by those who earn passage to it?
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no, i don't think life is a test in which i have to prove myself. right now, i believe in god, i do what is said to be right, and you know what...i focus on living this life, and not so much on what will happen in the next dimension...
i have a lot of thoughts on what you said, actually...but it takes time to compile and express them.
This piece, though...was written as something personal...emotional...the effects upon us when we are deeply wounded. -
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Just getting to know you, so I see now that you write truth, not fiction. You are a fine poet, and what I read of your conversation with Jimmy20John (I think) revealed the depth of your thinking, which interested me in your great intelligence.
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hmm...yes i write some fiction...but in every fairy tale, there is said to be a bit of truth, at least, and there is always much more than a bit in mine...I draw from what is personal to me, what i witness and experience. i liked talking with him IMMENSELY...brilliant conversation...it is often difficult to find someone with whom i can have a deep and yet...not emotionally steeped and insulting conversation.
Ahh and as to thinking...i do too much of it perhaps...but I am young yet, and may still learn to channel it towards some greater use...like...living a meaninful life (hahha) by my own standards and not the worlds.
it is a wonderful thing, to have someone notice your work, and you, and your thinking, and take the time to stop by, comment, and try to connect a bit. Thank you. you've added a glow to my day.
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wow, this is so beautifully written . i love it..
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Thank you ☺
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The gradual healing process you have penned beautifully...Each step to healing is to be cherished and celebrated...A wonderful write my dear Rachel!
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Beautiful poem, I don't know what to say it is wonderful. I love it.
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Thank you so much...I put alot into it...I like it too...amazingly.
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