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Tears in my Ice Cream

There's nothing I like more
Than to sit in my room
Watching House
And listening to the rain flick my window

But today, and yesterday
I couldn't do that
Because tears were busy falling out my eyes,
Landing in my ice cream

I needed someone to talk to
But that person was the one who made me like this
And how can I stop crying when the only one who can make me stop is the one who made me start?

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  • Ti Amo Te Quiero
    October 27, 2008
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    Good job!! Thanks for entering and good luck


  • Shuberth
    October 27, 2008

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    Please put the option number in the authors note box I cannot figure out which option you have chosen,
    I think you have chosen Option 2d if I’m not mistaken…

    Anyway the poem is very sad, very emotional and I can understand this thing… well written…