it's now dead, and we're through.
I can no longer miss you anymore,
leave, but don't slam the door.
You changed, or maybe I did,
but our love is gone, I admit.
I can not pretend any longer,
without you I am stronger.
Our love was definitely strange,
but it's different now, it changed.
She walked in and she came to win,
my jealousy has returned, I'm achin'.
The rose you gave me is now wilted,
drained from life, can not be lifted.
3 months and I can barely breathe,
let me go, it's time to let me free.
Your heart aches, I understand,
but I can't go through this again.
You made your choice, you chose her,
I just miss the person I thought you were.
Author notes
option 2 quote a)I don't miss you, i miss the person i thought you were.
Velvet Rose Petals
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Comments
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WOW!
This is such a good poem, tells a good story, the rhyming and the flow was good too, I liked it… it makes me feel and I can well understand this thing..
Typo: Admitt > admit
“Our love was definitely strange,
but it's different now, it changed.
She walked in and she came to win,
my jealousy has returned, I'm achin'.
The rose you gave me is now wilted,
drained from life, can not be lifted.
3 months and I can barely breathe,
let me go, it's time to let me free.
Your heart aches, I understand,
but I can't go through this again.
You made your choice, you chose her,
I just miss the person I thought you were.”
Loved this
You did a good job with this one…
Thanks for sharing
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Great rhyme and flow. Love the fourth stanza:
The rose you gave me is now wilted,
drained from life, can not be lifted.
3 months and I can barely breathe,
let me go, it's time to let me free.
Thanks for entering and good luck
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