You are action
built on the flame
the soon carcass of night
keeping me warm,
a fireplace to slip out
becoming the natural unclothed
skin flaring to light
touch me,
this new scent of warmth.
While glasses line the floor
acid in our stomachs
eating away,
light headed desires
you can be my blanket
every inch of you plastered me,
as lips fall magnetic frustrations
teeth sinking this pent up withdraw,
I can’t and wont
let you,
let go.
Winter taps on the window
her jealous winds howl
envious of this incomprehension
far greater than love,
when we fulfill the cups with seas
I’m saturated in your sun
the splendor nights become
dancing to lock your soul and manhood
within my spirit;
We are a battle
pulling in and out
I fall to your pace
as your hands grip my hips,
no one will lose
But crash on frictions’ wonder
aglow by your presence
my face pressed
peering into what was made for me.
Bodies cuddle
in this forever season
blooming bliss,
We grow a tree
rooted to nights,
that watered;
I love you.
Author notes
contest key: "The itsy bitsy spider climbed up the water spout"
prompt:5.) Pen me something beautiful filled with love and passion and sensuality.
haha, i just had to use my pic 
A contest entry
- My first contest :) Loads of Options, Allowing Pre-writes. Come in and see:D by chilali.
700 points, ended November 5, 2008, 52 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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*Spurts incomprehensible ramblings*
... yeah... thats eh... FOOKIN' DEADLY!!!
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You nailed this!
If this is an example of how you have evolved as a poetess, you jumped light years with this poem. Very subtle and very romatic piece that I suspect will get a lot of recognition. Your use of indentation and metaphor will make this a showcase piece for you.
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I loved this. So very beautifully written, very soft throughout. Had a beautiful flow! Thank you so much for sharing this with me and entering my contest. Good luck!
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This is very well done -
continuous and well worded.
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" I can’t and wont
let you,
let go. "
I really like that, sounds like something
I would say.
Your whole piece was truly very good.
But I must say that I fell in love with your ending.
Loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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omg.... umm.... wow! jeez is it hot in here?!? ;P lol
wow, i think im gonna go take a cold shower now
and the pick is beautiful XD overall a great write, good luck
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lol take a cold shower with me
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lol, you wish
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ppffft, no
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oh, admit it. you want some o' this
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very sensuous and delightful to read
good luck in the contest
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Yes, lovely and surreal and powerfully passionate! For me, you have brought back wonderful memories of my own young love...And your pic is great! A wonderful read. Good luck in the contest.
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i love you, and this.
i miss being on allpoetry all the time.
miss our chats
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I think you have a good chance at winning this contest.This poem drips with saturated love and longing.Almost magic,the emotions that rage at your age.You feel earthshattering passion and love.You look for the perfect person only to be let down time and again.But oh the sweetness of new love and passion never dies only our ideas of what true love should be.Glad I got to read this.
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Ahh, another of your poems.
I enjoy reading them, they're lovely.
You suceeded in answering the prompt.
Great work, I love it
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It was like I was in a daydream while reading this, and I want to go there. What a great emotion you have evoked from me. Keep up the great work!
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Wow...it's beautiful. I've read a lot of other poems that have to do with passion and sensuality, but most are more pedantic and concrete. This one sounds surreal and beautiful. It flows well and the imagery is wonderful. I love it.
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