Never once bemoaned,
a moment of time
spent together.
Before that night
time stopped for me,
sound rushed my ears
clouding my senses,
as your hand left mine...
...for good.
Author notes
prompt: take my hand
30 words or less
A contest entry
- take my hand by going nowhere.
1600 points, ended October 27, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Somehow this write has a fatalistic ring to it. Maybe it's the "never once bemoaned" though, as the lines progress, it seems apparent someone has died.
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i agree with death of the author... the title was captivating and so fitting with the poem that followed. a nice sad take on the prompt. thank you
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Excellent.
The title is awesome...
The poem, just as.
Love it, good luck
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