Clinging wrist touch
like glittering jewelry,
dangling from cherished hands
As we cleave to love like
puppydog sweethearts
following the path that
leads to ecstasy
Entwined in rhapsodies
affectionate wings
A contest entry
- take my hand by going nowhere.
1600 points, ended October 27, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow talk about yummy good stuff
this is excellent
bravo
T
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this to me is a very deep and affectionate write. is it me youre looking for? lol
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awww you so murdered this part baby clinging wrist like glittering jewelry dangling from cherished hands this is the a very deep loving piece it robbed me so
good luck in the contest
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wow... where is that hand for me to take? jk... i think i know where... i just need to grab it.
this was so full of affection. thank you -
This is so beautiful and I love the background! Good luck to you in the contest
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Mr. Romance..
..is pouring on the poetic charm! ladies better hide the keys to their heart cause you bout to steal them away with this piece!! outstanding kid!
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This poem does put me in mind of days gone by and love was new and ever changing and growing from one minute to the next.There is nothing to take the place of new passion found in the heat of the moment.If I were to revise this poem I think I would put more focus on the contrast between first hot passionate feelings for someone to how love has matured and again become passionate and the newness of it every day that goes by.Any ways good luck in the contest.
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This piece is so beautiful with the descriptions of love. You chose all the right words and put it together wonderfully. The best part was the last two lines:
"Entwined in rhapsodies
affectionate wings."
These two lines say it all. No doubt. Good luck in the contest! Wonderful job! -
Short and sweet, I like it.
'puppydog sweethearts'
Great connection, I love it!
I read this poem and it made my day, thank you so much for sharing it.
It's so very endearing, keep up the good work! -
This is short and sweet. You have a really interesting choice of words which is unique and I like it. I like your ending two lines the best, :"Entwined in rhapsodies
affectionate wings"
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