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Live in the Night

Live in the Night...

the night

where all the creatures dwell that have been banished by the sun

never to feel his warmth, or to see his glory.

But she is more beautiful than he.

Us creatures of the night seek her out

the Goddess

our mother.

From her kingdom in the night sky she gathers us in her arms and sings for us the lullaby of the stars.

Lonely but never alone,

the choir of the night sing with her.

To my mother

my true mother

I shall sing my heart out and join her one day among the stars.

I am a beautiful creature of the night...

and someday

he shall weep at my glory.

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  • Pretty-Wicked
    October 27, 2008

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    WOW. Dude, it's a good thing we're married or what i want to do would be considered rape!!! I love it.


    • Nienna Calmcacil
      October 27, 2008
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      *GASP!*

      How DARE you try to steal my wife/mother/grandmother/secret lover/sex slave!!!!!
      You shall pay DEARLY for this abomination, Axelle.

      And you'll like it.


  • hks
    October 26, 2008
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    good!

    i like it how it is.

    :]

    much love,
    oldschool

  • Nienna Calmcacil
    October 26, 2008

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    ooo I remember this! Tis yummeh.

    Okkkkkkkkkay Not sure if you've figured out what the whole point system is, but...

    I'm giving you 3 smiley faces, which gives both of us points in doing so. (If you want to reward me, go over to the stars below my image at the comment and click where you want it to be ^_^)

    Points are basically good for 1) Reviewing and 2) Making contests.

    Ask me if you've got more questions darling. I bet you can figure it out, though.