I shuffle among the dead leaves
as they lie on the ground,
the chilling breezes of coming winter
dip under my collar
sending shivers through my bones;
I glance into trees, still full of life
bright colors lighting up
the forest of despair and death.
Sunlight filters through
warming face, giving hope
that time will stand still;
nature, however, paints her picture
the way of life for all,
with slashes of color
among the dying.
To each, there is a season
to splatter the rainbows
across the landscape,
to blend the jeweled hues
on each soul
they come in contact with,
to stroke a dying canvas
with life
while one can.
Author notes
just thoughts......
guess we should all splatter our colors...
- before the paint dries out
A contest entry
- Santuary Of Words... by SummerlandRayne.
750 points, ended November 6, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Thank you for your comment, i was going to that feel, i didnt want shakespear but needed something new!
i love this poem of yours, its a great masterpeice of emotion, i see the images you have placed but most importantly i feel it, intellectually note it, you capture experiences we all have had, but have not expressed in such a way. your thoughts and pattern are very rational and very human -
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Thank you for reading 'crimson rose 247' and your lovely comment. Another of my many 'just thoughts.....lol.....Glad you enjoyed.
best wishes
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Great work here
I love the poem and the backgroud brings it to light
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thank you 'stories' - glad you liked this.
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How very true Sis!!! Your imagery here is exceptional! I could feel the cold winds and see the leaves around my feet as I walked through this lovely verse. Thank you so much for sharing!
I love the AN's!!!
Az
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Thank you Az - glad you enjoyed.
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The opening of this remind me so much of walking the dog on the darker nights, my fave time of year
I do miss being able to walk her, was very inspirational to me. This is a gorgeous write, thought provoking to. Some deep words there, and so true. We need to splatter the rainbows every chance we get, or like you say it will be to late and the paint will have dried out...awesome way of putting it! A stunning piece hunni, good luck in your contest
Love the background to, beautiful picture!
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Thank you LadyD - glad you enjoyed this.
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So much truth in there! We must splatter our colours where we get the chance. And even if we think it's not noticed, because often it is and we don't even know it!
Wonderful write!
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Thank you kiwi - glad you enjoyed this.
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WOW! this one is very deep & for me it was very thought provoking. I really enjoyed this one a lot. the one stanza that stood out to me the most was the last one. though while reading it I felt sad.. but understood the meaning. I was wanted to be remembered for something.. At first I didn't want that.. now I have changed my mind. never did I think that I would ever write poetry or make bgs or write stories, I never thought that I could do anything that would leave a mark in life about me.. sounds odd I suppose. with your poem that you have here. you talk about splattering rainbows across the landscape, that sentence alone has such a profound impact on me and the imagery is outstanding.
This is one of my most favorite writes of yours.. I know that I love all of your poetry, but this is now at the top.
You truly are a very gifted writer, who's poetry is very deep.
I think that maybe I'll just camp out on your page for the next several years.. how's that for an idea??
good luck in the contest
kat
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Aw kat - what a beautiful comment, and such a lovely thing to say to me....I am honored.
yes - splatter your rainbows while you can - you only have this time, this moment.....
lol - don't camp out here, I don't write that much anymore...lol....but - we could just visit so come on by anytime - I love to see you!!
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This is beautiful...
Outstanding!!!
Love the flow of it, so elogant & graceful...
Great descriptive narrative that creates such imagery & depth within that enthralls throughout...
Well penned, well versed, well done!!!
Good luck in the contest...
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Thank you 'Fritz..' - I am honored by your lovely comment.
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No probs, it was my pleasure...
Take care,
Fritz...............
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A lovely written poem you just get better each time you pen a new verse
Bravo
Light and Love
Robert
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Thank you so much 'rc3' for such a lovely comment...
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"slashes of color
among the dying"
this piece is just so beautiful
I love your authors notes as well
it helps to drive home the meaning
and meaningful this is...
Good luck in the contest
and thank you for sharing
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Thank you 'October' for reading and your lovely comment. I appreciate it, and am pleased you enjoyed this.
best wishes
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I love this the first stanza is my favorite Good luck to you in the contest best wishes always be well
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thank you Starz - glad you enjoyed.
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Dark colour sprays in such strong words
Sad and lost in thought
Just how Autumn fades does life
Best wishes Julie
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Thank you Julie - glad you liked.
Yes, in all of creation Autumn fades into Winter.....
but for some, spring brings new life.....
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