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Spring Bouquet

This aroma in color

a garden bouquet

note, is it?

 

In lily or violet

a garden wrap,
is it peach?

 

A lemon fresh from a vine

hung from a tree or
is it Spring?

 

Morning on violets in

touch of the rain, or

carnations?

 

All layers combine scent in

warm of a new birth is
it lilies?

 

Each one from the garden as

each flower lap or

this candle?

Author notes

Quinzaine form:

1. The first line has seven syllables
2. The second line has five syllables but is the beginning of a question
3.The third line has three syllables and is the end of the question.

A contest entry

Please tell me what you think

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
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    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments

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  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    May 6

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    spring is my favorite time of year... you have penned an excellent poem here...good luck with the contest...peace and light always in all ways...kp


  • azlyn gold member
    April 14

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    How sweet and fresh...lovely spring images that I so adore! Thank you for filling my mind with such precious sights and images!

    Happy happy spring to you!







    Az

    • haley27 gold member
      April 14
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given. Haley27


  • HerbalGoat
    April 4

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    Very nicely done. I got lost in this poem, but the good lost, I could smell the aromas, I could picture holding the candle right in front of me. It was beautiful.

    • haley27 gold member
      April 5
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      Thank you

      Thank you for this wonderful comment given to my poem. This was a hardest form I ever did, because it was small detail. I'm glad you liked it even though. Haley27


  • Heroesrox
    December 13, 2008

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    SImpply beautiful imagery!

    ~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~Awesome~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~*~

    Really good write. You did a great job. It's really difficult to find such talented artists out there these days, and I believe that you are one of those "diamond in the rough" types! Great and inspiring! Deliciously poetic! Hahaha! lol. I really can't friggin' wait to read more of your works! Keep up the great work and post MORE AWESOME POEMS like this! Thank you so much for sharing....again!

    Again....awesome write!

    ^_^ (Cute, huh?...lol!)

  • vampedvixen
    December 7, 2008

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    I love the imagery you use in this poem, I can almost smell the fragrant things you talk about. They capture my senses and really bring about this sense of peace that feels as if I am walking through this garden myself, keeping myself in serenity and finding that inner joy that is far too absent from my own life. I really enjoyed this poem and I hope you keep writing. I'd love to read more of your work in the future!


  • rinzurajan
    November 9, 2008

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    exquisite poetry....

    as delicate as the onset of spring....

    • haley27 gold member
      November 9, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given. Haley27


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    November 9, 2008

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    Lovely work - it is a shame it hasn't had many reads, because it definitely has something. This is a delicate form, and yet you have used it in such a way that the verse seems free, and the questions incidental.

    • haley27 gold member
      November 9, 2008
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      Thank you

      Thank you for the wonderful comment given to my poem. It is a shame, but didn't have enough points to feature the poem. Oh, well try to come back for another candle scent. These were fun. Haley27

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