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Taste the sweetness, Butterfly! (For Praveen's Unborn)

                                           *                   *

                                                     *                   *

                          you’re              *               *                  a tiny

                   cute little             *             *                 butterfly

                 in your ma’s           *          *               womb, with

               unknown worry         *        *            or anxiety as we

              await  to hold you        *      *          cuddle and caress,

             kiss & embrace you.      *    *         What you know of

             this w o r l d yet? Yet,     *  *        it'll  be all beautiful

              as they will show you     **      the right path – your

              mother and your father,  **   and give you wings to

               fly higher and higher and   taste all the sweetness

                of life, while on your own you'll experience the

                 harsh stings of life. Oh! How merry is this time

                and how joyful our hearts to feel that you'll be in

               our midst soon, as we'll dance to your tunes! Our

             joys are like buds in blossom, waiting to open when a

           day will come, your birth         like a sunny day, and all

          faces bending to kiss, to              fondle with your playful

          hands and feet, like a                       flower kissing a pretty

          butterfly. So, while                            you are still dancing

          in your concealed                                auditorium where

          you’re practicing                                   to play your part

            before a huge                                         audience, we

              await to                                                  see you

                 butt                                                      erfly!

 

Author notes

My friends Praveen and Smita are expecting their first baby in December. I guess it will all be a chaos around the time with my marriage, and the baby's birth!!! both at about the same time! Hope it will not be on the same day lols!

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  • nsmurty
    November 6, 2008
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    This is fantastic:
    So, while you are still dancing in your concealed auditorium where you’re practicing to play your part before a huge audience, we await to see you butterfly!
    A great welcome note to the unborn.
    kudos



  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    November 6, 2008
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    Congratulations on your trophy for a spectacular write


  • afroqban
    November 4, 2008

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    beautiful write, u amazing me with each write that i stalk of yours lol. u make written word so much fun with your different formats, u are so creative all around. you are really setting a standard, my gosh, you are an awesome writer!


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    Oh this is just really precious. What a beautiful time this is and the wonderrs that await this baby. Your images are just wonderful! The shape you did is stunning!
    All the very best with this piece
    gaylene


    • Lencio Rodrigues
      October 28, 2008
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      thank you Gaylene, this comes when I am in my best mood, happy poetry and rhyme alike, otherwise I will just write as if I am writing a story! although all such work or mine is without much effort, my mood just needs to be right!

      Love and light.
      Lencio


  • maktub
    October 27, 2008
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    This was adorable and beautiful at the same time...
    Loved the form, too...
    Smile♫

    • Lencio Rodrigues
      October 28, 2008
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      thank you so much for reading this and commenting. I am glad u liked it

      lencio


  • chilali
    October 27, 2008

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    Aww! This is so lovely Lencio. So beautiful. I don't know what else to say! I'm glad I read this first thing in the morning. Hehehe. Thank you for sharing this with me


  • xTroubled-Teenx
    October 26, 2008
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    this is an amazing write. i love how you wrote it, and portrayed a butterfly to the unborn baby. i really do love this piece of work. i do love how you wrote it in the shape of a butterfly. im a fan of ellen hopkins, she's an author, and her books sometimes have been typed out in shapes like this. i really do love it please keep up the good work


    • Lencio Rodrigues
      October 26, 2008
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      Hi, I am glad you liked this piece of work. Thanks so much! I am just done with another poem for another friend of mine - its an acrostic and have just posted it, maybe you can have a look while I go to your work.

      http://allpoetry.com/poem/4717387

      Love and light,
      Lencio

  • ChattyCathy
    October 26, 2008
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    I love this

    your poetry encourages me
    I believe in you, too!


    • Lencio Rodrigues
      October 26, 2008
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      Thank you ChattyCathy, I am glad that my poetry encourages you! I will run down your page and see what you have. Thanks for this uplifting comment, short but very uplifting!


  • januaryrain gold member
    October 26, 2008
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    Beautiful

    I don't know what to say, it's beautiful. I have tears in my eyes.
    Congradulations to your friends, I'm sure they will treasure this poem. Also congrats to you on yours on your up coming wedding. There will be real chaos it they both happen the same day, lol.
    Thank you for entering my contest.
    Well done.


    • Lencio Rodrigues
      October 26, 2008
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      Thank you so much Sharon! In fact your contest inspired me to this, otherwise it would have been so much a waste of talent and creativity. so, thanks to you. I would just simply write a poem, but maybe not in this shape. I thought your picture prompt - the butterfly and the bee, perfectly suited for this topic, the beauty/joys and the sorrow/stings of life.

      Blessings,

      Love and light,
      Lenico


  • JohnnyD gold member
    October 26, 2008
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    ahhhhhhh, indeed a true poet who speaks not simply words, but interjects into them his love of the infinitesimal, beautiful things of nature and most befitting of this poem which I have no doubt they shall treasure.

    lovely,

    Peace be unto you and yours

    Len


    • Lencio Rodrigues
      October 26, 2008
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      Thank you Len, yeah this friend of mine means a lot to me and so is all that is associated with him and all that is yet to come. I truly appreciate what you had to say about this write. God bless,
      Peace,

      Love and light,
      Lencio

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