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Feeding The Ducks

Ireached inside the box of us,

eyes tightly closed shut...

 

Enie meanie miney mow
catch a memory of long ago
if it pains me let it go
enie meanie miney mow.

 

I grabbed a handful from the box ,
excited to see them all again.
Decided to ask them to stay
for lunch and a glass of wine.

 

We sat and had a lovely visit
on the deck overlooking the pond
feeding the ducks with bits and
pieces of our pleasantries.

 

So much to sit and chat about,
warmed by the mere presence
of an afternoon spent remembering
all the reasons why we had planted
our seeds together and grew life
from the uniqueness of our love,   
having no remorse no regrets for
the beauty that painted the walls
of our once upon a time together.

Laughing out loud at the tender
moments that even now make me
catch my breath, I stare at
them eye to eye with the same
clarity as yesterday's rising sun.

 

A slide show of images dance before
me gracefully on the pond alongside
a family of ducks waiting for another
tid-bit of memorabilia to nibble on...

 

until there was nothing left to feed

them.

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  • islekine gold member
    December 25, 2008
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    Aloha and thanks so much for your entry

    But please read all of the rules...and comply ...then re-enter your piece...Best wishes!

  • Starz of Heaven gold member
    December 25, 2008

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    Hi there and welcome to the POY this was an enjoyable piece for me it reads a bit like prose to be honest with you though but none the less a lovely piece remember no editing once a judge has commented.


    • nevadapoet
      December 26, 2008
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      Thank you for the comments...but I did not delete my entry, it was deleted by islekine for not following rules.

  • vampedvixen
    November 4, 2008
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    This poem brought tears to my eyes. Sometimes all we have left is that box of memories, and every time we reach into it, we don't know what we'll pull out. But if it's a sad one, we should let it go.. but if it's a happy one, then why not invite it over and let it warm us with it's nostalgia. I loved it


  • Kevin Moderators member
    October 31, 2008

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    hmm, needs a space after the big I @ front?

    fun presentation! Only complaint is that I find italics hard to read, they should be used for emphasis rather than everything..

    took awhile to get to the specific story/image, but excited to see it Pleasantries is kind of an empty word, though I guess on purpose...

    'so much to sit and'.. wish you'd talk about doing it, rather than just having done it. More images of the past, rather than the meta-review of it now... show us the beautiful history!

    the 'them' on a line by itself felt like a bit of a weak ending, and I didn't get the sense that it was in the same spirit as the rest of the poem..


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    I am left in awe of this write. How deeply this spoke to me today. Thank you so much for sharing this beautiful poem!


    Az


  • October
    October 26, 2008

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    Outstanding
    A true classic.
    In a word, simply put, Beautiful
    Good luck in the contest
    and thank you for sharing


  • Cannonsfire
    October 26, 2008
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    Truly poetic prose, and nicely done. C

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