Have you ever been bolted in a mental hospital?
Have you?
Have you ever slept on the cold musky bed?
Have you?
I have many times ago and many times still to come.
Bolted, locked, Shut, fastened.
Me.
I swallow the pills with haunting glances.
The nurse could not give a damn.
The water goes down my throat.
I feel like-
I feel like dying.
Shoelaces confiscated,
Strings nonexistent.
An extra blanket at night.
Won’t shiver as much.
Cold.
Kills germs the technicians say?
Idiots.
Jackasses.
Treat us like the shit we are.
The food is not suitable for a dying dog.
You would think I were a dying dog.
I am losing weight.
I am dehydrated.
I am delusional.
I am.
Visitors are allowed an hour.
Tears are spent.
Words are harsh.
Some have no family to visit.
I am one of those.
Will somebody hold me in their arms?
Will somebody run their fingers through my hair?
Will somebody whisper “It will be all right?”
Will somebody?
Anybody?
Someone?
Alone.
Author notes
I thought long and hard before entering this for number 2. Its a spirtual yanker
Please tell me what you think
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Well I rather enjoy your writing, I cannot say anything except enjyoy the emotion conveyed.
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a very powerfull and emotional write, and to have knowledge of the old psychiatric wards it took me back there.
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I am truely hypnitized by these words...It like something I never read before. I 've read alot of poems before but nothing so true, so realistic ( I could almost picture me being there). Wow.
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sigh..please take my arms...if allowed..please allow me to touch the heart..as humanbeing..we can share the pain of thee ach other..a heartfelt task..got my inner and touched my inside..
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Very painful ! Nicely done.i like your style.
~Feb~
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this is a very powerful write, and its full of emotion.
I enjoy the use of imagery.
Thanks for entering.
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HI
damn, dude, that would so suck..
anyway; a very 'real' write! awesome! exposed emotion, raw torment, builds momentum, and the couple of lines with a repeated word to me made it more haunting, raging melancholy, yet so knowingly acceptive of reality, a reality we are all born 'to our own', and sometimes that seems to work and sometimes the world has other ideas!
Will somebody hold me in their arms?
Will somebody run their fingers through my hair?
Will somebody whisper “It will be all right?”
Will somebody?
Anybody?
Someone?
Alone.
truly, your entire poem is marvelous, the last part spoke potently to me, always, so far, working on that
saw you in 'shameless', great lead line that reverse psychology thingie worked afterall
PEACE
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Wow, this is so sad. I am sorry you are going through this. I don't have any personal experience with mental hospitals, but my fiancee was at one for awhile back before I knew him. Some of the stories he told me were horrible. This poem is full of so much emotion and truth. Great job!!!
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This is a powerful, emotional write. The way you wrote it really makes it so.
The food is not suitable for a dying dog.
You would think I were a dying dog.
I am losing weight.
I am dehydrated.
I am delusional.
I am.
I really like what you did with this stanza, leading up to the simple, yet loaded statement "I am." -
powerful.
wow, this poem could be so damn symbolic.
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A very emotional write. Things I hope to never go through, but have seen other go through it time and time again. It's never very easy, Never easy at all. Good Luck in the contest, and in life as well
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hurting
I have had too many of my family go through this and I'm sure it'll be me next. It's pulled some heartstrings, that's for sure. It's very poignant and well written, and I enjoyed it.
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So I got a couple of visitors lol. . apart from that, I can relate to a lot of this, directly enough. Powerful write with a lot of raw expression, which works well. Good spoken style. Good luck in the contest.
Take care
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Great write. I so can relate to it there are somedays I just want to give up and die. very powerful it made me feel something
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very powerful. you are not alone in that struggle. i've been there before. i love the last stanza. it really hits home. overall, this is amazing.
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I remember. Very well written. Some great emotional thought expressed here. Best of luck in the contest and all things!
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Ah..what a depth is flowing in your emotional journey of your soul..quite touching work by you..a great write inded..well done..
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