Upon an icy, stormy night
Without a hope, without my sight,
I stumble through the forest wild
My heart cannot be reconciled.
The burning tears stream down my face,
As I reach the forgotten place,
And stare down into silent well,
Where dark things live, in evil dwell.
Those evil things do scorch my heart,
Yet hope from my mind will not part;
Until upon the blazing breeze,
I hear the words my soul to freeze.
His last words that to me he spoke,
My mind repeats in painful croak:
“You’ll never be the one for me,
Now let me go! I must be free.”
And then I do surrender love,
The skies to crack in storm above,
Dark things rejoice in evil song,
I hear hell’s sickened death drum gong.
From that well crawls, oh mercy, Lord!
All things vile, evil, abhorred,
They surround me with slimy skin,
‘Thy must become our evil kin.’
Yet as the scorching rain pelts down,
I scream in pain, I tear my gown,
And cry, ‘I’ll never join you, no!
My pain’s my own; now leave me, go!’
The evil things do screech, ‘Then die!'
And as the lightening tears the sky,
They rip from my cold chest my heart,
My cries of pain rend hope apart.
My heart within that hellish well,
Does sink to where evil things dwell,
The hole in me does burn on fire,
As I forsake my last desire.
And as final breath burns body,
I hear my lover call to me;
He tears his way through forest wild,
His guilt cannot be reconciled.
He has now come to seek me out;
His split from me he’d come to doubt.
Yet all his hope does now vanish,
My body life does now banish.
He screams a scream of endless pain,
He feels my hurt, himself he’ll blame,
The rose he’d brought to show remorse,
Withers, becomes rotten and coarse.
He lifts me softly, and with ease,
Kisses my head, the world does freeze,
My eyes do shut in endless sleep,
He casts me into that well deep.
A contest entry
- My heart sinks to the bottom of the well. by Lady Michaella.
402 points, ended November 5, 2008, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Let Loose Your Anger by poets whisper.
650 points, ended November 28, 2008, 46 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give me more! by ASmileForYou.
700 points, ended January 7, 69 entries
Gold trophy winner
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Comments
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wow this is amazing! It is beautifully written, and it is just WOW! You tell such a story in this poem and illustrate it wonderfully. Great write!
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Thank you!
So sweet of you to say so
A very Merry Xmas to you!
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I don't even know what to say! This is so stunning! It is so flawless! Two words for you poet:
Preliminary finalist.
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Aww thank you!
You have really made my day. Thank you again, I'm so glad you like it!
Have a wonderful day!
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Reading this was quite a journey! An inventive write with a sharp rhyme. It kept me attentive.
Great job and thank you for entering my first contest!
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Thank you for your kind comment x
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Wow what a great title! I really love this. Such great feeling and such amazing words!!! wowowowowow The flow is amazing and the rhyming is brilliant. It is so hard to make rhyming work well and you did it brilliantly. Really beautiful!
LOVE
Pancake
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thanks forgotten! i really appreciate it
peace out ♥
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i love this! i love how you truly express your feelings. i also love the choice of words! pls. keep writing!
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Hehe I'm glad you like it, thanks Autumn
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Wow, this is amazing!!! What beautiful description, and it has such a nice flow... I love stanza 7!
breath taking write!
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Thanks so much for your sweet comment i'm glad you liked it!
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woww this is amazing!!! what a sad story you tell so beautifully!
My favourite lines:
"Yet as the scorching rain pelts down,
I scream in pain, I tear my gown,
And cry, ‘I’ll never join you, no!
My pain’s my own; now leave me, go!’
The evil things do screech, ‘Then die!'
And as the lightening tears the sky,
They rip from my cold chest my heart,
My cries of pain rend hope apart."
wonderfull!
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