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They, He, She Remembers...

A memory
That never should've happened
However, she's glad it happened

It's his birthday
They are alone
In his room
At night
His parents in the next room
Their friends, down stairs
Both of them
Sitting on his bed
In silence

They hold each other
They fall on the bed
Laying down
She flushes from the closeness
His scent is on her
His body is against hers
She's on top
Laying on his chest
She hears the sound she loves from him
His heart
He takes her hand with his
Guides her hand to his abs
She flushes more from where her hand is
Feeling his smooth, soft abs at her fingertips

They rotate on his bed
She lies down on the bed
While he is on top
He goes to her neck
His mild breath touches her skin
She gets a little light headed
The hot breath reaches the valley of her chest
His head rests there
Slowly, he uses his nose to touch the exposed skin around the cleavage
She loves it so much
She wants to beg, but wasn't at that point yet

They hold each other again
Every time he does something
"I'm sorry" always comes out his mouth
"It's okay" comes out hers
Laying on her, holding her
He brings her leg to his hip
Her heart beats faster
Was his mind aware of what he's doing?
Then, it happened

He settles, rather, fell in between her legs
Her mind goes blank
He gets out after three to five seconds
He lies beside her, holding her, saying, "I'm so sorry. I didn't do that on purpose."
"it's okay" was all she said

They go outside, in the foggy, cold, strange night
They hold each other, and go back inside

They sit on the stairs
His head resting in her chest again
His nose rubbing her skin
His breath, slowly licks her skin
She feels so vulnerable
She couldn't take these teases
She wants... more
She wants to say more

Except, she's shy and nervous
She's scared
Of being denied of her wish

Their time together comes to an end
Her mind couldn't stop replaying everything
He thinks it should've never happened
She's glad it did
He doesn't know what she's feeling
She doesn't know what he's thinking

However, the memory still lives
No matter what
Even if
It's remorse to them

Author notes

This actually is a true story that happened to me. I really liked him. So I was very light headed after that friday night... What was interesting was the fact that it was Friday the 13th. LOL. It did took me awhile to get over. But now that I look back it, I think that was a funny and great moment in my teenage life right now. It was his 16th birthday.

I spitted out soda at my dad when we went out to eat. Three times that happen.

"purple pizza painted a poisonous pickle."

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  • lesbian-in-love
    October 23

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    This was very interesting and very well written. I really enjoyed reading this. It was well done. You are going on to round 2. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • Sheilasbabygal4life
    October 23

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    This was a very good piece you have here. i enjoyed reading this. You can go too round 3. It will start up as soon as this one is over. Thanks so much for entering and best of luck too you in the next round.


  • Lonely-Lost-Angel
    October 20

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    I love this. it is so real and puts all the feelings into everything.
    i think we may have a winner but idk yet lol


  • Heva Feva
    May 31
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    I forgot to say that I liked the structure.
    -heva


  • Heva Feva
    May 31
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    that's so sad... Good luck and thanks for entering.
    -heva


  • MaddCuppyCake
    May 15

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    very nicely done... i've been there, except there werent apologies, just giggles. he was a really really great guy and i hated when we broke up. but i know how these things go. anyone could relate to this. brilliantly written. great work
    best of luck and thx for entering


  • grammabuff
    May 3

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    An intriguing title - I had to read the poem. Your straight-forward language fits the story you are telling. There are a few problems with tense but well done. Thanks for entering.


  • Night Terrors
    May 2

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    Wow I must say you are braver than I. I couldn't right about it. i think you did so great however.

    The Positives:

    Brillantly written and great wording through out. Loved this amazing

    Room For Improvement:
    Nothing I can see you did wonderful



    My Favorite Part:

    He settles, rather, fell in between her legs
    Her mind goes blank
    He gets out after three to five seconds
    He lies beside her, holding her, saying, "I'm so sorry. I didn't do that on purpose."
    "it's okay" was all she said

    That was so amazing I think it was just wonderful
    Overall:

    I give this an 9/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.

    ~*~Apathetic Poison~*~


  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    April 22

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    Hey wow haha that's well amazing that you would share such an intimate and personal moments with us.. Good piece I rather enjoyed it.. Congrats round 2 see you there


  • Lime Ocarina
    April 22

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    A very static memory I can imagine, and written in the proper manner for it.
    Wonderous.
    Thanks for the entry!


  • Ami
    April 7
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    Great Write and
    Thank you for entering
    Good Luck


  • Umi Juvariel
    April 1

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    Interesting write you have here. Reaching the limit and pulling back can make one light headed indeed. I've been there before. Excellent write and good luck in my contest.


  • Heavenly Angel gold member
    March 23

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    Teenage memories...how they remain embedded in our psyche
    Maybe that memory has remained for a specific reason?
    At any rate, I did enjoy the read
    Thank you for sharing and for being part of this contest!
    The best to you!


  • Emotional-wreck
    February 18
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    They sit on the stairs
    His head resting in her chest again
    His nose rubbing her skin
    His breath, slowly licks her skin
    She feels so vulnerable
    She couldn't take these teases
    She wants... more
    She wants to say more

    wow i really loved this. it was so deep and felt like i was in the room with you. wow ...good luck!


  • FallenxAngelxMisfit
    February 17
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    thanking yoo for entering this great poem good luck

  • poets whisper silver member
    February 16

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    thank you for entering the contest. If my comment is sparse, it's just that I have 165 entries and it's hard to make a decent comment to everyone.


  • Nicada silver member
    February 11

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    This is a very stunning write,and you have used some amazing imagery here too. I guess you have to give the boy some credit for respecting you enough to stop his romantic gestures. Great job on this poem and thanks so much for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • Walking Oxymoron gold member
    January 21

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    That is actually incredible.

    You write it so well... and it's a shame you never got to find out where it was all going to lead.
    I'm pleased you can rem,ember wit with such vividity... it fades with age.

    Keep writing.
    This is marvellous.


  • infectedxheart
    January 8
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    brilliant, thanks for entering.


  • Princess Cuddle Bug
    January 6

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    this a great write... it flows with ease and it kept me ont he edge of my seat wanting to read more! im not sure which option you choose thongh... please put it in your An asap! lol

    thanks and good luck,
    ~*Princess Cuddle Bug*~


  • mizzamerica91
    December 4, 2008

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    This is a well written poem, and flows really well. It kept me reading up to the last line, and thats one of the most important things in a poem

    Best of luck in my contest.
    Devon


  • Maylette
    December 3, 2008

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    The story that this poem tells is so layered - I really like the different points of view that you use and the way that it feels like I could just step into your words to see what is happening good luck in the contests

    ♦ M


  • HeavensNewestAngel
    December 3, 2008
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    This is a great poem you wrote. Best of luck in my contest!


  • dewfall
    November 30, 2008

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    i would consider this to be a story within a poem, rather than one poem embedded within a story containing more than one poem... feel fre to edit and re-enter


  • HereComesTheSun
    November 29, 2008

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    this piece im not sure fits the contest becuase i didnt not see it as one of the prompts. but the poem it self was a well written piece showing a story that truly is heartbreaking yet a reality to many woman and men
    good work

    • albinoblacksheep720
      November 29, 2008
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      Well... Sorry

      I was going to ask about entering my poem since I know doesn't with any of the prompts. I was use your title from your contest as my prompt. Because this is 'our little secret'. Sorry, I should of ask before I enter.


  • Shannon62875
    November 25, 2008

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    WOW!!!

    This is a very good write.. It kept me wanting more the whole way!! I mean DAMN!!! You did an excellent job.. your also going on my favorites!!!

    Shannon*Leah


  • Kiss the girl--x
    November 24, 2008
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    this flowed brilliantly, and was written with perfect imagery

    thanks for entering
    ♥


  • ChaingangAngel
    November 24, 2008
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    WOW

    Wow the imagery in this write is beautiful!

  • Nicada silver member
    November 8, 2008
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    This is a nice and very descriptive poem. Although I don't see how it fits in this contest. Nice write though and thanks for entering. Blessings, Patty


  • Dangerousparable silver member
    November 5, 2008
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    so lovely yet so wrong


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    November 1, 2008

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    This is interesting. There is a lot of fumbling and insecurities when you try to rush into things you're not ready for. You painted the picture nicely. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.

    ♥
    whisper


  • Sick Sunshine
    October 26, 2008
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    such an innocent moment..


  • xXtired-of-cryingXx
    October 26, 2008

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    This is great, I love the flow to it and it i sooo deep, but it does not fit the prompt so you are at a disadvantage there, but i love it so much that I will exept it so congrats on getting into the finalists!!!


  • fake-or-real-smile
    October 26, 2008

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    Wow.....this is different to what I expected people to enter but different in such an amazing way.

    I really like this because sometimes a physical touch can stir sooooo many emotions and when emotions are involved, something sexual with someone makes it so much more complicated.

    Things happen when we don't mean them to, but those are the best moments in life he may have thought it shouldn't have happened but I reckon he doesn't regret it.

    I love the title of this poem and the whole poem.

    Well done, thanks for entering and good luck.

    Rebecca

    x

  • piccola silver member
    October 25, 2008

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    did you mean to write "happened" as in something happened in the past? you have the word happen and it kind of makes things confusing ...

  • xXtired-of-cryingXx
    October 25, 2008
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    WOW!!!!

    This is , just.... wow!!!!!! I hve no idea what to say! This is ... I'm speachless!!!!! wow!!!!!! Ok I need to clear my mind..... Ok this is a really x5 great poem, I really love the way it flowed! THNX FOR ENTERING AND XxGooDLucKxX

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