Goodbye,
I’m sorry for the pain I’ve put you through,
I’m sorry for the tears that run down your face,
I’m sorry for the sadness that weakens your heart,
Just know I wasn’t strong enough,
I couldn’t let go,
I couldn’t drown out those piercing sounds . . ..
I’m sorry,
Goodbye, to the strong,
Who live on?
Goodbye, to my valentine,
My love will always be yours,
Goodbye, to my heroes,
Who always have the strength to carry on . . .
Don’t cry for me,
For I will live on,
In your hearts . . ..
Forever.
A contest entry
- If you were to die by Starz of Heaven.
625 points, ended October 25, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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this was a very emotional and i imagine a very heartfelt poem, this poem is raw its blunt but most importantly of all its powerful
i particularly like I’m sorry,
Goodbye, to the strong,
Who live on?
Goodbye, to my valentine,
My love will always be yours,
Goodbye, to my heroes,
Who always have the strength to carry on <<< i think these were perhaps the most powerful lines for me -
I think that good bye to a life that is done lived is a thing that we all need to write about thank you for your entry best wishes always be well
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