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Blue Coated Lenses

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Blue Coated Lenses

We cannot deny the harshness here,
in a world filled with stress,
heartache and fear.

Feigning false cheer
we avoid the duress,
we cannot deny the harshness here.

We work at a task to be sincere
and we cannot access
heartache and fear.

Some are unclear,
obsessed with a success,
we cannot deny the harshness here.

In a world so bright yet so austere,
it’s so hard to confess,
heartache and fear.

So my blue coated glasses make it clear,
that my world’s not a mess.
We cannot deny the harshness here,
heartache and fear.

 

 

 

Author notes

Villanelle:
A Villanelle is a nineteen-line poem consisting of a very specific rhyming scheme:
aba aba aba aba aba abaa. There is no syllable count restriction
The first and the third lines in the first stanza are repeated in alternating order throughout the poem, and appear together in the last couplet (last two lines).

I made this poem more of a challenge by alternating the syllable counts: 9/6/4 - 4/6/9
Form Resource: shadowpoetry.com

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  • xXGoddessofPainXx
    November 1, 2008

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    Thank you for entering this contest, however due to lack of entries I have to close this contest.. However I shall start something else.. So thanx for your efforts and so sorry..


  • The Gambler
    October 29, 2008

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    This is the most professional write I have seen on AP since I became a member. Lane told me you were the best at form poetry and I see what she means. I'm putting you on mt favorites list. Thank you!


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    Wow.. the form is stunning sis. The words hold such depth! I think we all wear that blue coloured glasses at times... for to face the truth is often to feel naked and alone.

    Fantastic write!


    ♥


  • Pure Thought silver member
    October 25, 2008
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    No luck involved here.

    Pure poetic heart, using a skill honed to perfection.


  • HaleyMary
    October 25, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Sis. Wonderful poetic form and flow. I liked the part of being unclear and obsessed with success. It made me think of how maybe sometimes people may not know what they want out of life and will try to be at the top of their form only to lose sight of what they want in their personal life. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


  • Aussie Gypsy gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    This is amazing, it holds a certain truth in it, you have done the form beautifully my dear. Best to you in the contest


  • myrataal silver member
    October 25, 2008

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    As always ...

    the beautiful lyrical way in which you share your wisdom! Well done, Poetess. A unique write.

    Love
    Myra


  • Swan song gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    opps

  • Swan song gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    Beautiful dear! a differnt villaielle but a good one


  • JustinReid
    October 25, 2008

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    Nice Form

    Although I'm more of a free verse writer, I can still appreciate the difficulty of writing in a style such as this. I'm new to allpoetry and so far I think your poems are very well written. I do not see any need to edit or revise your work.


  • PassionsPromise gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    Great job and loved the entertainement on the page as well. Those damn bunnies tend to take off on a moments notice. Good luck with it all.

    Tory


    • Amera gold member
      October 25, 2008
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      hehe... Thanks, your Jeffie boy is a card, he cracks me up.


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    The naughty bunnies ran away
    I've gone to get some more today

    Hurry along you three Amera has a huge bunny farm for you to play in


  • cricketjeff gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    A fiendishly clever take on a very old form, beautifully worked producing a Villanelle that reads as a completely new form.
    This is first class poetry, I can only stand back and applaud.


    • Amera gold member
      October 25, 2008

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      Thank you and this comment is hilarious! This is the first time anyone ever gave me applause without actually giving me the applause. Perhaps it’s a Zen applause like the sound of one hand clapping?

      • cricketjeff gold member
        October 25, 2008
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        They were existential bunnies
        You have to will them to appear.

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