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Do We Walk Alone?

Are we alone the makers

of all we see and know?

Do we create disasters

burdens that we tow?

 

Do we trod through human thoughts,

appearing before our eyes?

Illusions brought to form,

but never realized.

 

Can energy create form?

Clearly we are here,

from energy we were born;

we can never disappear.

 

Are we the force behind

all we believe to exist?

Is there a hand behind the cradle

lying within the mist?

 

Chains of human life connect,

where does the chain begin?

First thought of creation

was it born or always been?

 

Are perceptions limited

within the human mind?

Unable to understand,

yet persistent to find.

 

Answers to the questions,

are deeper then the mind;

from all of life's intrusion,

the answers are hard to find.

 

Clutter of beliefs,

build barriers to truth;

surpassing what is simple,

from seeds are born the fruit.

 

Life imitates the truth.

The planter of the seeds,

does not perform in the harvest,

but overlooks the deeds.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Tshepi
    November 5

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    I trod through human thoughts

    Agree totally, you reminding us that we are not creators, show often we forget..

    I often think and even pend a lot time going through other people's thoughts, only to come to wrong conclusions

    Your perspective on this piece will keep me grounded.

    Love i


  • Ellis gold member
    August 17

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    Why Things Work

    It is amazing that these complicated things
    We have surrounding us usually work!
    Do we think that what our mind brings
    Could design the organs which in us lurk?

    How could anything work like our bodies do,
    We and all surrounding us humming along?
    We don't give much thought to what imbues
    It all with workability -- until something goes wrong.

    Cars, computers, -- do we design them by accident?
    Do we build them by chance? Silly question, isn't it?
    Yes, silly me to ever wonder about the precedent
    Of how this all fell together by chance, and all fit!

    Nothing we design and build could come about this way.
    Cars, computers, -- intelligent people designed and made.
    How did these recent discoveries of what is possible today
    Come to fit into this world? The laws of nature are obeyed.

    Why do things work? The cars, computers we have now
    Could have been made for George Washington and the Minute Men
    If only there had been someone who had known how,
    Known how to make them back then.

    These things would not come into being on their own by evolution.
    There has been an evolution in the progress of computers.
    Did this happen by itself, or were people designing a better solution?
    Does anything get made without designers, builders, and users?

    What about computers and cars? Both from some Designer?
    Or did they fall together by chance? Don't need Bill Gates or Henry Ford?
    Just let the computer and the car by themselves become finer?
    To design and build anything, intelligent people have to be on board.

    How come this computer works? It is so complicated,
    Layer upon layer that all has to function right.
    How did the stuff come about of which this computer is made
    That allows it to have been put together to handle every byte?

    It is stuff that has been around since Moses walked the earth.
    They did not know back then the molecules that would give birth
    To computers and form this machine were going to be used
    Today to make it. For that they may be excused.

    Do the atoms and molecules of which this is made
    Know what they are doing? They don't know!
    It absolutely requires an intelligence to have laid
    Out the plan to put this thing together and make it go.

    I say again: -- how did the atoms and molecules
    Of which this computer is made get to be able,
    Themselves, to make it work and do
    All these things of which computers are capable?

    Back with George Washington nobody knew
    That silicon chips would be able to do this. Who did know?
    How did all the right elements come out of the blue
    To exist today in all the right combinations just so?

    It's easy to see and know God exists.
    Organization formed from the primordial mists
    In space and time required a plan
    Of a Designer much smarter than you or I am.

    Nothing could exist without intelligence.
    It's organization and complication is too much.
    We aren't smart enough here on earth to understand.
    In Heaven we'll expand until we understand the plan!

    What we know here is limited so.
    We have so very very far to go!
    So ignorant are we now we can't see
    The plan of God, -- we can only believe.

    We don't abstract the profoundest fact:
    That in the elements all was packed
    By God -- everything that is here now
    Was revealed, as God's plan shows how.

    All was there in the mind of God
    Unfolded through time as the elements plod
    In motion through space as the human race
    Is born on this earth of God's grace.


    --Ellis


  • Keith Drew gold member
    August 6

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    Excellent!

    Forever our children asking questions in their curiousness.
    But not even our parents can tell us the real truth.
    For they are but children so curious themselves.


  • Rovingone gold member
    August 4
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    Excellent and so full of wisdom and truth. You always seem to carry such an important message in all your poetry.


  • Enchanted Legacy
    July 31
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    Very Nice

    very nice
    Go on!


  • Andrea Gogri
    July 28

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    I love these lines..

    "Clutter of beliefs,
    build barriers to truth;
    surpassing what is simple,
    from seeds are born the fruit.

    veryyy thought provoking!!! thank you and God bless!!


  • Vickie Rosa
    July 3
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    VERY INTELLIGENT PIECE

    A sheer delight to read and wonder on. I love all the stanzas there remarkable. Beautiful work my friend, you deserved the gold for this write. Amen.
    peace be with you my friend


  • rite
    July 1
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    What goes on behind the front mankind perceives to be reality is mind boggling because most never were able to pierce through the facade. We live in a subset of distorted information from which many important things were intentionally omitted. But the human mind is always searching for the truth. It does not matter whether the truth is kept secret for low purposes or spread because it overwhelmed the one who discovered it - the truth has its own way to find its way to our awareness. There is no object or entity that can prevent it from achieving just that. Thank you for creating and sharing this profound poem. I enjoyed being on this page to read and ponder. Take care.

  • Vickie Rosa
    June 24

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    LOTS OF WISDOM

    This poem was wonderful with so much inteligence.
    you have great insight which comes from a good heart,beautiful work and sheer poetry you have inside you. peace be with you


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    May 24

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    life imitates the truth
    planters of the seed

    this is a wonderfully good poem hit deep as all yours do
    thanks, and godbless
    T


  • Keith Drew gold member
    May 16
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    The answer is, that there are no questions.
    How can there be?
    If there are no answers.

  • drifting cloud silver member
    May 10
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    This is a work of art, my friend, offering the reader lots to think about.

  • Virginia Logsdon
    April 27
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    Awesome poetry and great ryming and meter.

    This is a lovely and very thought provoking poem.You are talented!


  • Edie gold member
    March 27

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    'Clutter of beliefs,
    build barriers to truth;
    surpassing what is simple,
    from seeds are born the fruit."


    Perfect verse this one, great write...


  • Hated4life
    January 23
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    This is really good I love it

  • RechercheCadaver
    January 4

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    I'm not sure this reads like a poem and the seed metaphor seems a bit redundant but I liked what you had to say and you raised a lot of interesting questions such as: "Are perceptions limited
    within the human mind?" and the ending is very intriguing as well. Seems a bit choppy though, like trying to put many ideas into one poem, but there is a solid base here and "Clutter of beliefs,
    build barriers to truth" is a perfect line, I love that one.


  • gladyspshaw57
    January 2
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    Sister! You and the Spirit did this.

    I am overwhelmed with this writing. The last stanza is insight, and by insight, I mean I see it with my mind, and with my heart. Sometimes we are used to plant a seed, and we try to cultivate, and harvest the crop, but those are not the planters job. one plants, another fertilizes, and then the harvesting is done by the laborers of Gods choice. Amen?


  • YouKilledMeBabe
    December 2, 2008
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    I LOVE IT


  • Cosmic Musketeer
    November 23, 2008

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    Very broad spectrum of ideas covered, written very accessibly. Though the questions are short, they spur infinitely longer answers, which of course will never be true.


  • IrishGypsyRose silver member
    November 20, 2008

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    Beautifully Penned!

    An excellent piece! A lot of thought provoking questions here and you answered them masterfully. Very Insightful Write. I enjoyed it 100%!!!! ~mandie~

  • Virginia Logsdon
    November 19, 2008
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    Lovely and thought provoking!

  • Virginia Logsdon
    November 19, 2008
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    I really liked this.There are some thought provoking words here.


  • Venugopal gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Clutter of beliefs,

    build barriers to truth;

    surpassing what is simple,

    from seeds are born the fruit.

    revealing poem


  • Away From the Sun
    November 12, 2008
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    Thank you so much for your entry, here's some clappies that I owe you!

    A very lovely write, as I told you before.

    If you have time someday, could you explain to me these lines, as I think I got lost somewhere? (Brain is over-taxed tonight so it may just be that...a beautiful poem, regardless, I'm just rather duh at the moment!)

    "Life imitates the truth.

    The planter of the seeds,

    does not perform in the harvest,

    but overlooks the deeds."

    Why can't I figure this one out, when I can dissect T.S. Elliot and e.e. cummings?

    Think it's just been a long day. Love to you!

    Debbie


  • Rose Angel gold member
    November 12, 2008

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    Alot of thought provoking questions here and you dealt with them well..You desrved this silver, and glad you won it...You have a lovely flow and rhyme here too..Bravo for the write!

  • Away From the Sun
    November 10, 2008

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    Lovely entry, well-worded and descriptive of thoughts we all have - and questons we all must ask ourselves (although I surely could never ask the questions or voice the thoughts so beautifully)! Thank you for entering. Debbie


  • Kathleen a Nazarene
    November 4, 2008

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    Good Write!

    This is a fine write for the Contest & poses all of the questions that an existentialist would pose! Great content, flow, timing, rhyming. All the best in the contest. You should do well. The Title is fitting & I think my fav part is:

    Are perceptions limited
    within the human mind?
    Unable to understand,
    yet persistent to find.

    This to me sums up the predicament of the mind of man on his own effort! Bravo for this!


  • Rob. gold member
    November 4, 2008
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    Very Insightful Write.

    I loved this write, not because of the flow nor the form, but how it portrayed the questions within the questions.

    I think I could write a small novel in trying to answer all the questions, but of course they become only relevant to the individual asking the questions.

    Great Job, I see nothing I do not like, Best of luck!


  • FlamesDragoness
    November 2, 2008

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    How could we ever resist such
    wonderful questions of philosphical
    heart...

    one of my fav's
    "are we the force behind
    all we believe to exist?
    Is there a hand behind the cradle
    lying within the mist?"

    So many to choose from, it's
    a heavenly feast!
    I could write a truly dark story on
    the above one alone!

    "Clutter of beliefs,
    build barriers to truth;
    surpassing what is simple,
    from seeds are born the fruit."
    (perhaps that is the truth of
    frustration many feel in
    organized religions) well done!

    oh my...a cautious warning at the
    end too!
    "Life imitates the truth.
    The planter of the seeds,
    does not perform in the harvest,
    but overlooks the deeds."

    Truly thought provoking,
    what a wonderful and blossoming
    mind and heart your ink beholds!

    flamesdragoness
    thankyou for your entry into contest,
    it was a pleasure to read and
    feast!










  • Maili Knephthan gold member
    November 2, 2008

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    I like the simplicity of this but the fact it says a great deal in the poem. It is worth reading a few times to get all the meaning out of it.


  • Dark Otter
    October 28, 2008

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    An excellent piece!

    It is worth multiple reads. Deep and yet poetic, it is another strong entry in a contest filled with strong entries. You have given me food for thought, so I'll go have dinner. Three funny clappies for the nice lady.


  • Providence
    October 26, 2008

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    The relationship between belief and thinking; between thoughts and action is subtle
    For instance, those who believe that the Earth is flat will report that they know that the Earth is flat and act upon those beliefs whether the belief is sound or misguided.

    Belief, thought, emotion and action form an intrinsically woven web that we ourselves weave and ultimately get tangled in.

    You have woven a wonderful poem, full of deep insight and soulful reflection.

    Ovations!

    Marianne


  • DogFish silver member
    October 25, 2008

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    "We have just enough religion to make us hate, but not enough to make us love one another."
    -- Jonathan Swift
    ...but I think you are asking all the right questions!


  • Puppydog gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    THOUGHT PROVOKING!!!

    This is the question people have been trying to answer since the beginning of time.'s


  • Blueskywonder
    October 25, 2008

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    A very well thought out piece of poetry offering me a greater understanding of the prompt Thank-you for sharing and taking time out to create your poem

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