You come to me like Jekyll and Hyde
flashing to me your most hateful side.
Then you turn on a dime and give me a smile.
Could it be that I dreamt the entire while?
You cry for comfort while wielding a knife
and you blame the world for your double life.
Nothing's your fault...we're all out to get you
as you tear us to pieces so we often regret you.
You cry on my shoulder and bite off my arm.
Your voice says love while your eyes say harm.
Your life is haunted but you sleep like a rock.
Your hand is steady, but you say you're in shock.
They think your bleeding as my life drains away.
"Why did she hurt you?", to you, they say.
You shrug your shoulders with eyes too wide.
You're only a jackal with a murder to hide.
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wow, I'm very critical of AABB rhyming but you pulled it off in perfection. The last stanza was great and actually, every stanza was well done. First stanza last line, instead of "the entire" why not use "all the" less syllubals so it runs more smoothly. Just a note. Anyways, it is a fantastic piece and you should be proud of it. Like I said I am critical of this pattern because it is easier to do but you played it well. Thanks for entering.
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I have people in my life that are like that and it is hard to deal with I am sorry that you have them in your life take care good luck in the contest be well
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