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The Full Story

 

 

Perched upon the edge of the world

she sits, writing poetry, safe inside

the boundaries of the old gray cottage

formed and moulded from Cornish stone

where heartened and stirred

she stares out to sea, contemplating

its vast emptiness -

a quiet corner of the ocean

where people are few enough.

With hints of an irreverence

bordering on blasphemy, she wonders

if it is enough to simply speak

of beautiful things

without necessarily

putting a beautiful finish on them -

cartographers' mistakes
precisely placed, clustered cowherd shippons,

a sodden Norman church -

a place to halt for salt.

The letter came at noon;

she takes it straight up to the walls to read –

those ancient drystone walls

where she’s walked a thousand times before, unnoticing

no time to change, just to tie back her hair,

the wind in the east – a brewing storm. 

She stops to read; time pauses and watches intently

but the camera obscura in the medieval church tower

points away, so intent

on the humdrum present unfolding

changing history -

of plesiosaur and the swan's death song

rain in the woods, the mournful cry of the coot;
in them are the fleeing hoof,  recollections of the injured horse,
memories of slow, snowy deaths and swift hieroglyphs –

willowy scratchings of toes in sedimented sand
skeletal mussel shells, the spirals that ring

the secrets of the old voices

and the games of the moon.

Now, all she has are his words -

heaving clouds

with only the splash of her dress giving colour

to the darkling day -

broken shells, a coil of hope –

a hundred vipers’ worth of green hemp

tarred, silken, brown-foamed

and heavy as her heart

with no-one to help her drag it home…

   

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

                  

The Full Story

©crisstiena 

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  • zt
    May 28

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    Your words as lonely as the scene you've set. So many images of substance and depth here, I daren't put one above another. The drystone wall is complete. There is always hope, Cathy. Heathcliff will come round eventually...


  • Balldinger silver member
    October 27, 2008

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    salt in my teeth...

    and still the camera cannot capture your intensity. your secret place is a famous painting no one has ever seen...

    amid the fragile greens
    you were
    a solitary ship,
    armed
    among the vegetables
    fin and prow black and oiled,
    as if you were still
    the vessel of the wind,
    the one and only
    pure
    ocean
    machine:
    unflawed, navigating
    the waters of death.


    ~ Pablo Neruda



  • tnk
    October 25, 2008

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    A quiet whisper of gratitude

    Thank you, once again, for sharing with us. Tis something to always be looking for in my favorites section. Akin to a new release of, something, or, other. needless to say, as always, your pen craft is unique and precise, slicing through the mundane with razor precision. Yet, with all your skill, nothing can outshine the very last line. I know the rest of the poem is valuable and important but the last has enormous weight regardless of what came before it. Well done. ~ Timothy

  • LoveNLyrics
    October 25, 2008

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    i like your last stanza the most. your imagery is great and you paint a vivid picture. thank you for your entry.

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