Ditch the ads, upload images and much more - upgrade today from 5.95/month!
Read • Contests • Groups • Learn • Forums • Store • Help
 

Chocolate outrage

I was deceived, immeasurably!
That little brown bar,
Had the beating of me,
My self respect reduced so far,
When I woke up I was spotty!
Like I had a disease from afar,
My teeth were no longer shiny...

I have long loved my pearly whites,
So when the chocolate rotted them,
My vexation reached new heights!
Each tooth, once a polished gem,
Now they give people the frights...
But far from my anger is the stem,
The reason for my lonely nights...

I’ve put on weight...

A contest entry

What did you think?

    : , Your review:

    Comment Suggestion: What is your your first impression?
    • Line numbers  • Invite them to read
    : no Cost: 0 free left 0 points, You have (?)

Comments


  • DesolatELifE
    November 5, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    This is rather funny!
    I like the ending quite a lot!


  • Walk-Free
    October 26, 2008

    Edit | Reply
    this was oh so adorable.

    you were the only one who attempted this choice, and i think you did a fair job

    thanks and best of luck

  • carole21
    October 25, 2008
    Edit | Reply
    cute take on the prompt . . good luck in the contest !!