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Quest, part ten (the "end")



"Do we stay or do we go?" Doc intoned. "Or do I go and you stay?"

"Or more importantly," said Rayne, "are we able to go? Look, Eileen,
let me show you all the power sources we utilized. It's solar at its
best, 1955, a far cry from Aubrey Eneas and the others in 1892.

Eileen put her hand on Rayne's arm to steady herself,  saying softly,
"1955." Then, loudly in disbelief, "19-55! 19-55! 19-WHAT? But ...but,
right at this minute, it's still 1876, is it not?"

"If we are not all dreaming it is,  but 1955 is a good year," said Rayne
reassuringly. "You'll like it there. You can shop!"

A piercing glance from Eileen let Rayne know that was not a good
argument. "You can vote!" he exclaimed. Frowning, he said, "Well,
when we get you updated papers ! Whadya say, Partner?"

Eileen stood, dumbfounded, for the first time unable to speak.

"Do we stay or do we go?" Doc  repeated. "Or do I go and you stay?"

"Eileen, I can't go without you! I'll...I'll...I'll stay here, if that is what
you would choose." said Rayne frantically. He got down on one knee,
on the dirt floor of the livery stable. "Your future is bright, Eileen. I can
see you by my side. It was the experiment, proving doc's  theory,
the love of Roxie that got me here, but finding you....that is the real miracle."

Composure regained, Eileen grabbed hold of Rayne's vest, pulling him to
his feet. "Alright. Let us assess. Are we all under the spell of Roxie?  Do
we need another miracle, or is there a way to power your invention....to..
to...?"

Rayne threw his arms around her. "To 1955!" he exclaimed. "Together."

Doc reflected, "Under the spell of Roxie....hmmmmmm......"




‘Not so fast, " warned Eileen, walking around the vehicle. "By the love of
Roxie, may we figure this out. But I need to talk to Mama...about 1955."

Looking into the vehicle, Eileen exclaimed, "Start explaining, start with this,"
she said, pointing to the small box  mounted on the dashboard.



Rayne shouted, "Doc, you proved it! The lateral-flux capacitor! And the Roxie
catalyst, it worked!!

Doc patted the Chevy, "A true Roxiemobile! It has that Roxie glow."





"Lateral-flux capacitor?" questioned Eileen. "Your power source? The sun could
do all that?"

Doc explained, "The problem is generating enough return power." Turning
to Rayne, he continued, "That was the problem in getting you back, on your
own. The mental-transference worked from the shop, because of our
Power Surge, but I couldn't predict what might be here to use as a catalyst
for your return."

"I have another question," Eileen interrupted, "Would steam generated power
work to boost the solar and the...the lateral....the lateral-flux capacitor for
the return?  And...wait a minute...it's gotten dark outside. Do you have to
wait for the sun?"

Rayne said in distress, "What a commotion we'd cause again. I think we
need to act quickly, in the dark of night, before morning breaks."

Doc spoke up, "Eileen, you have an idea stirring in that pretty head, don't
you.?"

"If it's as simple as a boost from a steam engine to activate your systems,
then, I do have an answer!" replied Eileen confidently.

"Rayne, where did you find her, at the University?" said Doc, admiring
Eileen's initiative.

"Actually,"  Rayne said teasingly, "she tripped over my feet."

"Your big feet." countered Eileen.

"And when I caught her....well, I knew I always wanted to hold her,"
sighed Rayne.

Eileen turned pensive, "There are a lot of things I don't know right now,
especially the "stay or go" dilemma.  But I do know we could get a team
of horses to hook up to the Roxiemobile, haul it to the railway crossing,
get it on the tracks, hook it up to the car waiting to leave on the midnight
express run. No stops, greater speed.

Rayne interjected, "That would give us about almost six hours..."

Eileen insisted, "But I must talk with Mama!!!"

Rayne sought out the stable owner to obtain his promise to guard the
vehicle, now covered in tarps again, until they returned. The promise
of a very generous fee assured  even more cover, as the stableman
began moving bales of hay to block any view of the "contraption"
from the door.

The three walked briskly down the street, Doc gawking at all the buildings,
watching for any familiar to him, that would have survived to 1955.


"Look, down that side street, Rayne. That's the Cambridge house,"
Doc pointed out excitedly!

"Keep focused Doc," said Rayne as they picked up the pace to a very
brisk walk. "Hey, Doc, I feel just like we're off to see the Wizard,
except YOU ARE the wizard."

"And this isn't a yellow brick road," countered Doc, "but we do need
a really big answer when we get to Eileen's house."

Eileen scolded, "You two are talking nonsense! Now, be on your best behavior,
for here we are."

All three attempted a cheerful, "normal" attitude and demeanor as Eileen
opened the door.



"We're back," she called cheerily, as Mama and Doc rushed to the door from
the kitchen.



Rayne gave Mama a big hug and shook Doc's hand.



"I'd like you both to meet my mentor, MY Doc," said Rayne as he presented
the inventor.



"Wonderful daughter, you have. Smart and clever! You've brought up a fine
young woman," Doc said earnestly.




"Thank you, sir. You are very observant," said Eileen's father approvingly.

"Come into the kitchen," invited Mama. "There's brew on the counter, a big
kettle of stew still simmering on the stove, and fresh baked bread from this
morning.  But first, go freshen up. Eileen, show them the way."

When they were all settled at the table, after enjoying Mama's fine meal,
Rayne looked over at Eileen's father. "Eileen is, well, she....she's just
perfection. I can't imagine life without her..."

Eileen's father spoke up, "Are you asking for her hand, young man?"

Eileen interrupted, "We just may be going on an adventure. But it's far
away, very far away, to where their business is located."

Mama asked, "But it seems right for you, doesn't it?"

"Oh, Mama, it could mean I may never see you again. Eileen's eyes welled
with tears, as she was overcome with emotion.  Looking at Rayne,
she said, "Oh, I am so sorry, but I just don't know if I can do this."

Doc, Rayne's mentor,  finally spoke up, addressing the parents,
"Eileen has a remarkable gift. She is very perceptive, makes good decisions,
from what I have observed."

Doc continued, pulling out a paper from the document compartment of
his travel gear, "Rayne, this cablegram came this morning. I need to explain
it now. Seem's there is  a group of independent investors travelling in
Europe, looking for opportunities. InvestTen, they're called."

Passing the cablegram to Rayne, "Doc continued. The CEO and CFO are
arriving at the shop next week, for I cabled them back. They want to invest
in Arden Concepts, form a partnership, help us develop our inventions."

Eileen perked up, forgetting her tears and her own dilemma. "But you
will keep controlling interest, have creative control, right?"

"Well, you have a better head for that than Rayne and I do. Rayne,
all the procedes from our last patent sales went into our current
project. We do need investors."

Mama had gotten up and was standing behind Eileen's chair, comforting her.

Rayne's head was filling with questions, " But how did they get interested
in Arden Concepts?"

Mama thought, well, that's a nice name. Rayne Arden, Eileen Arden,
that had a nice sound.

Doc continued his explanation, "Someone travelling in Europe had
several contacts with the group and convinced them we were the best
investment they could make. It was, well, it was Sarah.

Eileen sat up straight. Sarah!

"Mama," come with me upstairs, We're packing my bag. I won't need that
many clothers, for I feel mine will be quite out of style."

As they hurried upstairs, Eileen's father called out, "Mama, better bring
Rayne's bag back down with you. Seems he won't be staying!"

Rayne leaned back in his chair, "What just happened?" he said cluelessly.

Doc, smugly happy he had been the instigator, said to his counterpart Doc,
"Doc, alright with you?"

Getting up and going to his special cupboard, Doc took out a canvas sack
and presented it to Rayne, "I managed to trade wtih my neighbor who had
been up to Lowell last month and bought a dozen bottles of Dr. Thompson's
concentrated Roxie elixir. It's for  you, Rayne."

Inventor Doc's eyes popped. "That's it. Just what we need for back-up
to re-power the generator if all else fails! And it's concentrated! Now all
we need is a carriage and a strong team of horses."

Eileen's father gestured them to follow him, "Bring your gear  and we'll get
the team and buggy ready out back."

First, Rayne ran up the stairs, gave Mama a big hug, and right in front of
Mama, embraced Eileen and kissed her tenderly on her forehead.  Mama
showed him where his bag had been stowed, as Rayne gave a quick
backward glance to Eileen's room and to the vision of Eileen packing,
and carried his bag downstairs hurredly to join Doc and Doc out back.

Hours later, with all the inventiveness of Rayne, both Doc and Doc,
the  equipment  and engineering help of the stable owner, Eileen's
plan was in place. The bright yellow Chevy, disguised with tarps, had
been pulled by the horses, pushed and maneuvered until harnessed to
the back of the train.

Mama and her Doc stood in the darkness on the platform, praying
that all would go well for the adventurers, Doc clutching the custom
bottle that Rayne had presented to him, reflecting the images of
Rayne and Eileen.






Convincing the conductor and the engineer that this was the only way
they could transport their "Challenge" entry to Framingham, Eileen, Rayne
and Doc were strapped in the Roxiemobile, Doc making the last adjustments,
checking time, date and destination.



Eileen held tightly her bag with her poems and the drawing she had
made of her home, knowing her place was to be with Rayne, but srill
clinging to her memories of her own world.



Rayne protectively placed his arm around Eileen, holding her close.

"I pray this is right for all of us, that we be protected on our journey by our
own faith in each other. I hope the future is ready for me," Eileen smiled.

As the train fired up, steam escaping, Doc activated the system.

"To the Future!" they exclaimed in unison!







Mama and Doc watched as the steam arose in a giant cloud. As the mist
slowly lifted, they strained to see down the track, guided by brilliant
moonlight, seeing only the rear of the railway car, the bright yellow
Chevy vanished in time.









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Headline, Boston, August, 1955:  Arden Concepts Revitalized.

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THE CONCLUSION, QUEST, PARTS ONE THROUGH TEN

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(Quest script graphic courtesy of Moony. Others by Aesthete2000.)


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  • T-Dizzle Mcnizzle
    February 27

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    I am hungry for more. Now you MUST write a sequel please....pretty please.....pretty please with sugar on top! I LOVED IT!!!!


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      February 27
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      Note the "messages"--poems continuing the story
      from each of the characters, "spalining" more,
      laying the base.

      I have part six of "The Poetry Aisle" in word right now,
      started about four hours ago. When I get those characters
      to a climax and conclusion I'll be back to Quest. I was
      just too tired out at the time to continue===and
      had family holidays to deal with!!


  • waydownuponjoy
    December 6, 2008

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    Terrific !

    and a good ending to the first story off the press. You did a fine job of holding this reader's interest and your drawings help fill my imagination with imagery for the characters. Very nice and there will have to be a sequel now for I'll never know how Eileen made out with her new beau and the definite readjustment to 1955! You have shared several talents with this production, now get busy!

    jy

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      December 6, 2008
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      Hah! Thanks for the push
      and the faithful reading!

      There is a little more info
      if you read the "Messages
      from each of the characters,
      which follow next.

      I had to find a point to stop
      temporarily, but it was hard
      to leave them stranded!!!

      M-C


  • RadioPJ
    October 26, 2008
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    This family-friendly short story has held our attention and our hearts. Carefully crafted with adventure and just enough science fiction to tap our imaginations, the characters keep us grounded with their wholesome and matter-of-fact approach to life. Fun for all, the audience wants the story to continue -- a testament to the author's skill. Bravo.

    ... And now a little more on time travel here:
    http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UAWB4IUc844

    Thanks Aesthete for an engaging little story. Your efforts are appreciated.

    (Now rest up and get us some more soon!)

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      PJ, what a wonderful review!!!
      Thank you so much!
      I have enjoyed your thoughtful comments,
      throughout the adventure.

      To keep them alive in our minds,
      the characters will be sending messages
      from time to time to time to time.
      Hmmmmm...more time travel.

      Caught the clip ---of course Doc and Marty
      would make an appearance.

      I couldn't resist paying a bit of homage
      to the pair, Doc's image, the clock tower,
      the vest, the speed needed...

      • RadioPJ
        October 26, 2008

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        Oh good, I'm glad you will keep them alive for us. A good story shouldn't end, but accompany us into our own futures ~

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          October 26, 2008
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          As the movie serials we spoke of...where was that on Yem's page..
          or, I think on quest, one of the parts. And the the movie sequels,
          and at last TV, friends returning to our homes each week via
          the home screen, and the soaps of course at the forefront!

          All keeping the characters alive.....


  • Summer52
    October 26, 2008
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    You deserve a good break, Mumsy.


    summer51


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      No reat for the channeller,

      Eileen just sent a poem to post!


      • Summer52
        October 26, 2008
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        Haha... !

        Okay, Mumsy...will read that poem of Eileen...

        Now...I will post my poem for Rayne.


        summer51

  • Summer52
    October 26, 2008

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    Dear Mumsy...as kismoony said... YOU ARE ONE AMAZING LADY! Kudos to you...

    But...

    If you will make another PART for this... much better... I want to know how many "kids" would they have in the future... Just curious...

    Another happy ending for the "Till death do we part" episode for Rayne and Eileen...


    summer51

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      I think they will haunt me, the characters, if I don't let them live on.

      Just need a breather for a while. And everyone can imagine what may be happening.

      thank you, summer

      Mumsy


  • moon2u
    October 26, 2008
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    Bravo Aesthete

    Photobucket

    I picked you some beautiful lilacs
    to honour all the hard work
    and creative genius
    it took
    to write your story
    all the attention to detail
    all the graphics
    you have outdone yourself
    sister of my heart
    mwah Moony

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Moony, lilacs! Thank you.
      I think Eileen might like those, too,
      sketch them to use for her poems,
      or perhaps press a few petals
      between the pages!

      Thank you for all your attention to the details,
      and for all your wonderful comments!!

      love and hugs,

      M-C

      • moon2u
        October 26, 2008
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        Photobucket

        no
        thankyou for writing the story
        and creating all the characters
        and the graphics
        that was a lot of work
        poems are much easier than what you have done
        never sell yourself short
        you are an amazing woman
        hugs Moon

        • Aesthete2000 gold member
          October 26, 2008
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          Oh, Moony, thank you.

          Switched from short stories to poetry in college
          whenever I could because of the typing! Of course,
          that was so long ago it was on manual typewriters.

          If the characters of Rayne, Eileen and Doc
          stop haunting me,
          perhaps I can dash off
          some poetic lines!!

          • moon2u
            October 26, 2008
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            that would be wonderful
            kind of missing your poetry
            and you need a break from the story
            very demanding

            omg manual typewriters ...I remember those

            • Aesthete2000 gold member
              October 26, 2008
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              Figuring Rayne was about two years out of college
              at the time of the story, that's what he would have
              used, too, when in school. Only my roommate and I had to rent one,
              even tho paying our own way thru a private women's
              college, no funds for our own typewriters.
              Popcorn popper and one desk lamp, one reading lamp,
              that's all we were allowed. No hair dryers, omly those
              installed by the pool dressing rooms. Towel dry, foam
              rollers and pin curls!

              But all that would have been heaven for Eileen,
              including the automatic washers and dryers in
              the laundry room, the kitchentte right next
              to our dorm room.

              • moon2u
                October 26, 2008
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                even in high school I remember having to rent a typewriter to type my assignments
                and we all remember the foam rollers and the pin curls at least you could sleep in those
                what about those bristle ones...I remember trying to sleep in those...ouch!
                and we had an old wringer washer in the basement and a clothes line.

                • Aesthete2000 gold member
                  October 26, 2008
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                  Ha! I never had a clothesline!
                  Seems automatic washers and dryers
                  came along before portable hair dryers
                  by some years! Aaaaaggghh...more research!

                  Besides the ouch, the still damp hair in the
                  morning when undoing the rollers or pin curls!

                  • moon2u
                    October 26, 2008

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                    now I remember getting a hair dryer when I was about 13
                    it had a bonnet and a hose attached to a plug in unit.
                    so that would be in the 1960's about 1963
                    although there was a girl that lived across the street from me
                    and she had everything including a hair blow dryer
                    I had never saw one of these before and was fascinated cause we had nothing like that at our house.
                    we did get a black and white tv around 1955
                    but not many channels back then
                    the old tv tower attached by a black flat encased wire to the areal which was mounted on top of the roof of the house

                    I remember my Grampy had a book
                    with all these line patterns
                    some zig zag
                    some vertical and some horizontal
                    kind of like a map to tell you what was wrong with the picture
                    Then there were these giant tubes in the back that were always blowing out
                    you had to replace them constantly
                    my Grampy fixed everything himself
                    including the old Studebaker car
                    and the Ford truck

                    • Aesthete2000 gold member
                      October 26, 2008
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                      OMG, I had a '52 bullet nosed, used Studebaker,
                      which had a short life under my ownership,
                      smashed by a City truck who blew thru a stop sign
                      at very high speed, catching the back of the car.


  • Sir Ima Cucumber
    October 26, 2008

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    "Actually," Rayne said teasingly, "she trpped over my feet."

    Oh, no, no, no, no. This can't be quite the end. We readers need a little piece at the end of the story where they arrive back in 1955, we want a quick look at Eileen's expression, mainly just so we know she is fine with her new surroundings. Eileen is a progressive woman so the 1950's should be a far better time for her, maybe she should see that as they stand there upon first arrival. Modern cars, lights, even part ownership of the business are going to be all things to her progressive liking. Maybe she stands there and makes a declaration to that effect, and to their future.

    Yes, with or without her, Rayne had to return...Roxie had to be restored, and as we all know, Mox, err, I mean Roxie's continued existence is far bigger than any sentimental feelings between two moonstruck heros...Roxie HAD to be saved! !

    Ten parts, put them altogether and see how many words there are. Must be about 7000, breath deep, relax, you made it, and the great thing is, you kept your audience! Usually people read one, maybe two and then no more, couldn't pay them to read more, but this is a testament to you and your story that you kept them all coming back!

    Oh and I like all the orange in the artwork, it made me feel nice and comfy. The artwork you did throughout was tremendous, add that to the writing and this was quite an accomplishment!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      And thank you for your support and commentaries!

      Tripped now repaired....couldn't focus on the screen
      any longer yesterday!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      I know, I know, Ima, but you know how long I can go on!

      I hesitated, but I was committed to ten, and didn't want
      to drag it on.

      All the things you mentioned, yes, but would lead to more
      and more. So, tiredness prevailed-----it takes so long to get
      it all together--and I thought it best to end there. Well,
      the headline implies new life in the company.

      It will bug me and bug me if I don't relate her reactions,
      so.........................................

      But first I have to figure out the realities, birth certificate,
      history, etc for Eileen. Overseas bride? Alien bride? Taking
      someone else's place?

      And her first hot shower!!!Even 1955 technology will be a dream
      for Eileen.

      And zipping ahead, she could vote for JFK, if they get her
      legalized.

      Yes,I saved Roxie. I'm getting too Yemish not to make that a
      priority!


  • hugh wyles silver member
    October 26, 2008

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    I wish some of the operas would end like this without the main characters singing themselves to a tragic death!

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Oh, Hugh, I so agree with you!
      I never would have made it in the classic world
      of opera that had those devastating endings.

      I tend to look for any happy interpretaion
      I can conjure for both reality and fantasy!

      But I am teetering on Yemishness, I feel!!!

  • hugh wyles silver member
    October 26, 2008
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    Dear M-C,

    I just finished re-reading ALL chapters 1-9 and now this #10 final. This last chapter I have read with a sense of impending loss as though I were in the year 1876 and about to lose two friends. Though happy for their future together I could feel for Mama and her Doc as all who are left behind feel when loved ones depart for far away places or far away times.
    Congratulations on a smooth and credible ending. I sympathise with your losing and having to rewrite muich of the chapter because I know when this happens to me, I am always left with a feeling that the lost original was marginally better than the rewrite.
    In your case I cannot imagine, however, that the chapter I have just read could be improved in any way.
    I do hope that, after a period of recuperation, you will embark on a sequel....
    Thanks and applause for great reading and entertainment.
    Love and hugs, XXX M-A.

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Hugh, I appreciate your dedication to re-reading the previous parts.

      Yes, the impending loss. I felt that already in part nine, and
      purposely used all black and white graphics to hint of the
      starkness of reality, the impending choices, while, of course,
      giving homage to the yellow Chevy.

      Ah, the re-doing. Never the same! Except this time my angel
      of lost words was looking out for me, for the ones I didn't remember
      got replaced with a better scenario. What I "lost" was the kitchen
      scene. What I added was the asking for her hand implication,
      and Rayne runing up the stairs to hug Mama and give Eileen
      the tender forehead kiss in front of Mama, letting her see
      his true affection. So chalk one up for the re-do better
      than the original!

      I appreciate your careful reading and your comments!
      Yes, recuperation. And enough time in my nights
      to undertake more.

      Thank you, kind sir!

      M-C


  • angelica silver member
    October 25, 2008

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    All good things come to an end!

    O I'm gobsmacked, an amazing story my dear M-C.
    I'm so sorry to hear that you lost half your work and had to re-do it and that's the hard part, trying to remember what you wrote. Well done sweetie I'm very proud of you and the achievement you have reached. The story and graphics are brilliant, the research you had to do must have been astronomical. BRAVO BRAVO
    Maybe one day you'll write a sequel on their arrival in 1955 and their life together. Well, I can dream eh?
    Brilliant my dear M-C.
    Love Joan

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Thank you, Joan, for all the cheers!
      I have appreciated your comments so much.

      And I have some left-over 1876 references
      that never made it to the keys. but I've
      already thought of a way to incorporate
      them into the future. Aaaaggghh! what
      am I saying? There will be sequels??????
      Well, not til my wrist recuperates!

      M-C


  • Mari Goes gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    I must say, you did an incredible job!
    I can only imagine how much work you had in your hands.
    So sorry to read that you lost part of this chapter and had to re-write it, I think I'd have kicked the computer off...but again, like Eileen, you took perfect control of the situation, and came with a wonderful result!
    Congratulations for accomplishing this dear M

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Thank you, Mariza.
      Yes, it was the project that kept on growing!
      "Kicking" was not an option, for a bump
      as I reached over to retreive a pen
      was the cuause of the vanished text!
      Accepting gratefully the congratulations
      and the red roses!!

      M-C


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    I want more...
    makes me think the impact of women in the world, how brave is she.
    you still have a grip on the reader you have manage to keep this grip throughout.
    your art work is of course an incredible addition.
    and I want more
    I love it
    God bless you my friend...

    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Hi, Kathy. I want more, too!
      Eileen definitely took up the challenge
      to accompany Rayne. Quite a scary
      situation! Ah, but the challenges
      that could await her in another
      century! She will need to up
      her bravery level even more!!!

      Thank you for following the stroy.
      I appreciate your comments!

      M-C

  • Summer52
    October 25, 2008
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    Oh??? Where's the END here...?

    I've read the ending awhile ago but not this one... without the ending, yet?

    Hmmmm.... you must be inspired for the PART 11, Mumsy.

    Good job for this one, though unfinished yet, cuz no "TO BE CONTINUED" label on the last part.

    Be waiting.

    summer51


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 25, 2008
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      Almost there, lost a whole section had to redo---just about there!!! Still working!


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    Crying!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    will re-create---and post every paragraph!


  • Aesthete2000 gold member
    October 25, 2008
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    OMG---just bumped the keyboard and lost all after thiis point---have to re-do.Darn.Darn.


  • moon2u
    October 25, 2008
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    looking gooooood so far sister of my heart
    applause


    • Aesthete2000 gold member
      October 25, 2008
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      My goodness, this is taking forever!
      Had to draw Mama and Doc...
      and adjust some of the graphics.


  • piccolo
    October 25, 2008
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    No ending yet? Snip, snip, bark, snurl, whiiiiine ------
    Hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry,
    hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, hurry, scratch, scratch, scratch ...

  • Yemassee gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    Ah it isn't finished yet. Ok, so I will return later today to give the entire 10 part story my words of praise, and also a general paean to all things Moxie.

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