i.
there were overcooked
emotions around the table
we-all ate my silence.
ii.
dine with the dyingcandles-
they will stare light
on us. i'll read
you
proses of mypalms.
iii.
you said "oh-how-lovely"
i thought "yeah right"
you kissed roughly;
over them-these-hands-of-yours-
narcissist bastard.
iv.
i can hear crickets
and i swear they're
after your letter that
you left; forgot
to address; to post.
v.
hammer-sound hams the wiredalley.
a man coughs-out-agony
and bents towards a-graveyard
of the-moving-world. somewhere wheels-revolve:
time exacts-5minutes. i watch: tea-turning-cold.
A contest entry
- snippets of you by piggyback.
6000 points, ended November 17, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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You have some very interesting poetic license here I enjoyed the first verse the most, I think. The last two lines are very intense too. I like all the poem/snippets, but these two bits really stood out. Thanks for your entry.
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this makes me want to stop writing, it's just amazing.
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i really like this...a lot.
helen~
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you are just you and this is a weird comment but I know you'll get it.
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Aww baby, I hope the silence is rejuvenating.
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wow; you've said so much in so little. i am envious.
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bleh... i will read yours now
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Nicely done. Love the last line.
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