[[friday]]
was i better today?
do i look "suitable"?
-your place or mine-
"fake it but don't"
"an eternity in hell"
[[saturday]]
a tearful girl
stands in the corner,
have everyone look away.
she's not okay.
today.
[[sunday]]
such beauty goes unseen.
cardboard life.
don't hide your smile.
today's a brighter day.
[[monday]]
deep pockets.
what's a wasted day?
take it all back.
one. two. three. four.
[[tuesday]]
show some more skin!
make them drool,
they're hungry and alone.
tonight's THE night?
we'll see.
[[wednesday]]
rising sun.
colorful creatures.
an expected shimmery fairy.
your plans are ruined,
but you look pretty...
[[thursday]]
this is what
missing you
feels like
[[friday]]
dead baby jokes.
out until dawn.
slept next to you.
"someone's definitely playing footsies."
your smile is amazing.
[[saturday]]
too tired to sleep.
coated in glitter.
stuck to vinyl.
happiness 50% off today!
Author notes
10/24 Errrr. That's such a mish-mosh of ideas haha.
I suppose constructive criticism would be neat.
11/1 hmm... I wrote nine haha.
A contest entry
- snippets of you by piggyback.
6000 points, ended November 17, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
just a dose
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Now these are snippets! I really like how they show such a vivid development. "Thursday" and the last verse were my favorites. Lovely work, thank you for this entry
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Thank you! :] I'm really glad you liked it. It was a fun prompt - really and truly
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i'm liking it.
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Yah? I haven't decided yet if I do or not... I dunno.
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Okay, so i read the contest description. This seems like a really cool thing to do! Too bad i dont think i can commit to 8 days. But anyway... for this "snippet of Winter"... I dont think you can really be too constructive about this, since it is after all just a snippet. However, it does worry me with the "eternity in hell part". <3 Nooooo!
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Baha. Yah. I didn't really know what to do or say....
[The first two are for work - they told me I dress to casually. The middle is for - gheez nvm haha. And the last two are quotes from a boy at churchy church.] -
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I love you both :]
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