With every word that you said
You kept me believing
Come to find that all along
You were deceiving
With every action done
You kept me going
Without the intention
Of me ever knowing
You led me on
You had me fooled
Without the intention
Of following through
You made promises
You could not keep
I was following you
Nothing more than a sheep
So my Master
What should I do
I can't remember
Life before you
What was it like
I haven't a clue
I forget how to breathe
I'm turning blue
You led me on
You had me fooled
Without the intention
Of following through
You made promises
You could not keep
I was following you
Nothing more than a sheep
To my obsession
You know who you are
I wish this distance
Weren't quite this far
I thought I could trust
But you left a scar
The whole ordeal
Is so bizarre
You led me on
You had me fooled
Without the intention
Of following through
You made promises
You WOULD not keep
I was following you
Just like a sheep
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Comments
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the second and fourth line portray great rhyme.
[master]. -i like how you used that word,, it really showed they were controlling you.
the last line used really effective repitition. keeps the sometimes shaky flow intact. -
master piece maybe?
"I can't remember
Life before you"
"I forget how to breathe
I'm turning blue"
wow... symbolism and honesty..
this poem again.. was sad but
again was full of so much.
too much to put into words.
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