It's been long since
a blessing came forth
to enlighten times shadows
Pleasing temptation
and grasping life
as though happiness
is slipping through
buttered fingers
Causing such emotions
by braising the soulless
keeping blemished promises
a bitter broken dream
Casting devotion into
what once was and now
will never be
Blissfully empty thoughts
breeding into cascading
and promising glances
while drifting off into slumber
Bleeding tears falling
dwelling on salted skin
trickling upon
darkened bruises.
A contest entry
- freeverse & prose [emotions attached] by xxRainbowDawnxx.
600 points, ended October 26, 2008, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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GRASPING FOR SMILES AND YET THROUGH GREASY FINGERS IT SLIPS...
that line of yours is just fantastic... I can picture this and now I really do feel down. I really think that line is just...perfect and one of the most smoothest lines in writing!!!
the end however...may be on the same level as what I mentioned above...*tears*
Excellent read hun!!!
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Bleeding tears falling
dwelling on salted skin
trickling upon
darkened bruises.
This is my favorite part b/c it hits so close to home with me. You are truly a gifted poet and I hope you never stop gracing us with your writings. I love ya girl!
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Such intense emotion! something that had my on the verge of tears and my heart weeping.. Can very much relate to the words here and the emotion.. truly a wonderful write..
Angel
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Wow.
This is the most images I've gotten from a poem in a long time.
Great post.
I saw that you have over three hundred poems.
Keep it up!
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Bleeding tears falling
dwelling on salted skin
trickling upon
darkened bruises.
<< what a great and powerful way to end a terrific poem, great write
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emotional stress
a beautifully penned piece sweetie which your words spread out in emotional sadness, these were my favorite lines which spoke out to me,,,keeping blemished promises
a bitter broken dream
these words project my life and feelings most of the time,,,blessings of life,light,laughter,and love...Firestorm
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oh wow this is awsome hun. loved the last stanza best the whole thing was just fantastic tho it flowed perfectly together and had amazing rhythm. I can relate to this is alot of ways, the words just seem to speak to me great job on this keep writting
xoxoxo
Tasha
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Oh how I know this. I agree with Jeremy, it has some very interesting ideas. I like 'bleeding tears' and 'salted skin'.
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This is a great write here!
Well done and good luck to you
in this contest. Always a pleasure
to you dear!
Jeremy0826
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