Just who am I, I ask myself
This person they call me
Though often they will call me you
So I am you maybe
Me and You, so who is I
Another just like us
Gee this is confusing stuff
Is it really worth the fuss
So now we have you and me
Plus this other I
How many more could there be
Thats right there's also my
My and I, You and me
Thats it I've had enough
Time to say no more, thats it
Goodbye confusing stuff
A contest entry
- Form Poetry Celebration #131 by Lyndon.
3000 points, ended October 27, 2008, 9 entries
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Comments
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This is a very good poem, it reads smoothly and is very well written. There seems to be two side to this one poem, there's the humorous surface, the bit you pick up on a light read over, the basic play off the many tenses and forms of referring to oneself. However, on a deep level there seems to a kind of self searching to this, a degree of finding who one is amongst all those words and referrals. A kind of Marxist id, ego, and super ego type thing. Could just be that I attended one to many sociology classes but that's what I got from this piece.
The only correction I have is that 'thats' need to be 'that's' because without the apostrophe its informal and improper.
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the age old conundrum, unexplained. I liked this for it's simple but well thought out writng
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i liked this piece.
it was interesting, and unique in its own way. 
WOW! awesomely done! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Very interesting, Thourghly enjoyed.
Very nice write.
Good luck and well done
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interesting piece. I really enjoyed the read. ~
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At first I viewed this poem as humorous, but upon rereading I felt that was a deeper dilemna. On a psychological level our id,ego and superego are indeed confusing. Thank you for your entry. Peace, Liz
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I like the rhyme and flow of this write. Great collab by all of you! Thank you for your entry.
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intriguing
indeed confusing, and yet, so very interesting...I like the natural easy way it flows
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