The wind makes a soft tune in my ear
as I see all the leaves dancing near
They gracefully jump towards the ground
Where I am, they fall all around...
Where reddish sunsets grow unique
and clouds show off their great physique
The trees stand, half-naked
A season so pleasantly sacred.
Author notes
This was just e imagining myself at a park where all the leaves would just keep falling on and on in an endless pattern above me. And the sunsets where I am... incredible!
A contest entry
- Your favorite by whispernthedark.
790 points, ended November 7, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short poems about the Autumn Season by The Fun House.
950 points, ended November 2, 2008, 38 entries
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Comments
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Simply captivatingly beautiful.
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wow
ncie write... i like this poem alot...
my favoret lines are
"The wind makes a soft tune in my ear
as I see all the leaves dancing near
They gracefully jump towards the ground
Where I am, they fall all around..."
=)
hope to read more soon =)
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Very good poem check your background however it makes it hard to read the poem but a good poem never the less
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I love the title! It gives more imagery to your work. It's a beautiful image in my head now.
Great work~ -
it's a wow! i love the rhyme, it flows flawlessly...
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Where reddish sunsets grow unique
and clouds show off their great physique
The trees stand, half-naked
A season so pleasantly sacred <<< these lines were beautiful and i think you did a great job on the rhyming , i loved your idea for this poem, it was short and sweet and rather beautiful to read
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This has a wondeful flow to it; especially read aloud. This takes me to a time in my life where I thought things were so stagnant and yet they too changed with the season. Great job
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Very nice imagery, a feeling of peacefulness. Thank you for entering the contest, good luck.
♥
whisper
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great write my dear. sadly it is snowing where I live in Schenectady New York
love the rev papa
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i love how it flows together. its so peaceful and love how it expresses love of nature
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Beautifully done!!!
Expressive & thoughtful with great imagery throughout...
Keep up the good work...
Well done!!!
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Beautiful picture. Peaceful and great. I like the lines:
They gracefully jump towards the ground
Where reddish sunsets grow unique
and clouds show off their great physique
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It's soft and flowing, but also a unique look at the season--even though there are trees and bushes with red leaves, I never thought of them in connection with a sunset before, or linked the setting sun with autumn. Beautiful!
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Beautiful
A beautiful write...so full of the love of nature.
Good luck in the comp!
Lilly
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Autumn is indeed my favorite time of year. I wish it hung around a little longer before all the craziness of premeditated sacrificial money mongers char the holy days. *grrrrrrrrr*.
Anyway, the imagery is outstanding and it
shows a less abstract side of your writing.
I love the way you up and down a straight
line. It's unique as is the first one I read
from you.
I'd only do ONE thing, were it mine.
switch 'all' for 'fall'. An alliteration
thingie that might make a difference.
Super!
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That was an awesome write with great imagery, I like it a lot! :-). OOOOOOO I have a spoiler, soon after this theres an episode where the leaves are replaced with white stuff :-P. J/K. Really though, it was a really good write.
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first off i am sorry, if it is in my favorites i have to read it, second, amazing, i read one of you poems before but this one i like and the background, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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