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until the end of time

I Will Always Love You
 
All I could ever ask for
is right here next to me.
When I walk, you hold my hand.
I couldn't ask God for anyone
better for me.
 
You are all I need.
 
My heart warms in confidence
that I know we are meant to be.
Your smile is your signature
to a love that I could only dream of.
 
I will hold your hand
until my fingers go numb.
If I see a tear,
darling, there will only be one.
[I will see to it that you will be smiling
before the second one drops]
 
Baby Blue,
I love you more than words can say.
Cliche? Yes. But I am not here to impress,
but to express.
 
You have nothing to fear
when I'm near.
Remember everything I said?
I meant it all.
 
Dear Alice,
your Jasper won't let you fall.
At least not alone.
 

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This is for my love, because I couldn't ask for anyone more amazing than her.

Prompt: Love is a endless journey of the two hearts. - Unknown

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  • jake0715 gold member
    December 7, 2008

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    this is a very good poem, makes me want to write more love poems, lol. the only thing i didnt really like about this poem was when you repeated expess right after itself:
    Baby Blue
    I love you like words can't express.
    Cliche? Yes. But I am not here to impress.
    But to express.

    Its not bad or anything, i just personally have live a peeve of repeating words like that lol, idk how everyone else feels about it tho. but anyways, it was a very good poem, it was nice to read, and it made me feel good when i read it. so bravo, good job.


  • alice-in-wonderland
    December 5, 2008

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    Absolutely Amazing!!!

    I find this just amazing. absolutely amazing. bravo. you have captured the very essence of death do us part. you mentioned
    I will hold your hand
    until my fingers go numb.
    and that is literally the meaning till death do us part.
    i love the rhyming and just the beauty you can see in the poem.
    good job.

    -butterfly


  • GypsyEyes
    November 30, 2008

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    this is short sweet beautiful and to the point and i like this! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! ~CarnalNineTailedFox


  • xxTheRadFreakxx
    November 11, 2008

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    this is a truly amazing poem! it gave me goosebumps just reading it! i really love this part:
    My heart warms in confidence
    that I know we are meant to be.
    Your smile is your signature
    to a love that I could only dream of.

    I love that one cuz my the min my boyfriend smiled at me i fell, this is really a wonderful poem i give you 3=]


  • albinoblacksheep720
    November 5, 2008

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    My, Oh Me, Oh My

    I love your poem. It sets a nice flow with Alice and Jasper. You read the books good enough to catch this and put it to words. I love it dearly. I hope you write more beautiful poems like this. I tip my hat and bow at your beauty. Bravo, my dear, bravo...


    • lowercase prelude gold member
      November 5, 2008
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      I actually haven't read any of the books yet. My girlfriend and her friends are obsessed with them, so that's where my exposure to it comes from. In our group, me and my girlfriend are considered the "Alice & Jasper"

      • albinoblacksheep720
        November 5, 2008
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        But still... It's lovely... Besides, Alice and Jasper are good, cute couple.... You are very thoughtful and thankful just like him... Good night, Jasper, good night...


  • PrabhuDayal Khattar silver member
    November 3, 2008

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    A pretty task you did by the penning of the loveful heart of the poet..well done..and thank you so much for such a heart warming poetry...


  • Lillianna
    November 2, 2008
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    Pure Love

    The best kind of love


  • poetic daughter
    October 30, 2008

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    This is very good. It almost sounds like lyrics to a sound. I like the tear drop part of it most especially. It truly brings out how much you love this person or how much this person loves the one they are talking about. Keep up the good work!


  • Deformed Duck
    October 28, 2008
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    This is so romantic!! She's really lucky to have you!


  • Blackbird Writer
    October 25, 2008
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    This is so pretty. You two are the Alice and Jasper of our group.


  • Little Miss Mental
    October 25, 2008

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    *gasps* I love love LOVE the last lines...you incorporated characters from Twilight, my favorite book, but this is so sweet...
    "I will hold your hand until my finges go numb." now that's devotion, especially when you will go down together if you must. Wonderful, words simply cannot express this.


  • SincerelyMegan
    October 25, 2008
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    This is so wonderful and I love how you wrote it about Alice and Jasper!
    Fantastic!


  • Sortingthroughlife
    October 25, 2008
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    Beautiful, just beautiful.

    You're super awesome!


  • Disturbed Prodigy
    October 24, 2008

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    Loving and just pure, i like this passion in this poem that hits kind of like a fire, and a promise at the end, was just beautifully done, keep it flowing


  • LadyJulietFreeDove
    October 24, 2008
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    I loved it and so will my sister.


  • Freak-in-BlackJeans
    October 24, 2008
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    This is so pretty!!!!! I love this! I have no words!

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