That last night
I saw you on your deathbed
I didn’t follow my mother’s actions.
I didn’t kiss your cheek
give you one last hug
tell you how much
you mean to me
I walked out the door
almost five years ago
with a choked out “goodbye”
and not a second-glance.
It snowed the day we got the call
and I remembered you hadn’t seen it
but once in your twenty-nine years.
But I knew the words
before they were uttered.
Gone.
Pack.
Funeral.
My worry wasn’t little petty things
not owning a single black garment
not what I was going to pack…
It was that
I hated my goodbye.
Author notes
My uncle.
February 29, 2004.
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A contest entry
- Reliving the Past by Dead Lover.
700 points, ended November 30, 2008, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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HEARTWRENCHING!!!!
I do feel all of us has made choices where we late wish we had did it different
I know I have, one does have memories though and faith that the one lost will always know we cared and am always keeping them alive within our hearts.
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Thank you.
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So sad
I believe those who pass knows of the pain we feel and how the living fights the goodbys for we so dont want them to leave . They do hear your goodbye even though w may think they dont
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Thank you so much.
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This write was very deep, and emotional. I really loved this poem; mainly because I have had something similar to this happen to me. Anyways, I just wanted to say good luck in the contest and great write.
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This was filled with so much of emotion. i enjoyed reading it. Thank you for sharing a piece of you with us here.
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How sad. Wonderful show of emotion. I really enjoyed reading this one. You really spun one on this. So much of raw emotion.
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Oh my dear..
When you said goodbye you hardly knew that something like that was going to happen.
And i' know you probably have beaten yourself up a thousand times because you thought it was your fault, but it wasn't.
In this piece i could feel the love shouting out all over it.
An awesome job!
Thanks for sharing and enetering.
Good luck in the contest.
-Mandi
*clappy
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Thank you so much! (:
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Mattias.
Danielle,
I know you might regret,
I know you might not forget,
I know you might cry.
And that is entirely alright.
You are loved for who you are, mistakes, faults and wrongdoings included.
With love, Mattias.
<3
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I thank you for pointing out the love, dear.
(:
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This is so heartfelt, the thing we have been warned against in our whole lives. I do hope you feel better and realize that when you both meet in the great beyond you'll be able to say everything you need to.
Naoto
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Thank you so much for your comment. I've learned to live with it throughout my life, but only wish to turn back time. (We're only human.)
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