Him,
this rain that falls down my fingertips
this poetry,
I write of him and sit alone
hearing the penning of silence
spinning wheels.
Must I take a sip
of a thought of why had we depart
or why he depart me?
it would of been better if
I could of have him in my room
and write of him before he
had faded like breathe
when we would grasp through our lips
dance here for me
let me be you I see in this
darkened room
so I can paint you
mount you
on my wall!
and there... I can kiss you
and I would not be afraid
to tell you that I had always loved you...
"my soul wanted to be with you
but pretended like it couldn't..."
No more you,
this kiss
that runs upon my window!
and it drips!
.
.
.
it drips...
Author notes
option 7
A contest entry
- Give me anything! by ASmileForYou.
560 points, ended December 16, 2008, 148 entries
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Comments
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Cool picture this
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very nice. a hint of naughtyness from a good girls mouth nice keep writing! i loved this poem
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I absolutly love this!
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This is so cute! I know exactly what you mean by the line,
"I can kiss you
and I would not be afraid
to tell you that I had always loved you..."
Good job,
Cadence
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I found this to be so heart touching, full of honest emotions and loved the way you had formatted this piece of art......Such a wonderful scribe!
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I think that this is wonderfully penned you did a nice job here good luck in the contest best wishes always be well.
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Sweet and filled with melancholy... a soft write that's filled with wonderful imagery and emotion. You should do well... but best of luck anyway
Ken
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This was a very sweet and sad poem! A very nice write! Thanks for entering!
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This is a great poem you wrote. Thank you for sharing and best of luck in my contest!
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Please read the rules
This is interesting and I hate to remove it but it just doesn’t take the contest rules into consideration. I’m looking for things like complete thoughts and punctuation. If you have one that fits the rules, please feel free to enter it.
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please check the list . . invitational only . . I'll remove this time . . maybe next contest !!
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i had to come read your poetry after you left such a wonderful comment on one of my poems. You are an excellent writer! This poem is superb - it has a distinct
style. I wish you all the best in the contest - you certainly
deserve something for this. Love, Lane
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lovely piece
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Great feeling and passion in this piece. I love the way it progresses and how you develop the emotions. I don't know how I'd revise this. Great job.
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honestly this was good, i love the feel of it and i have to say it felt goooood, keep it flowing
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sensual feelings of a lover..
you paint your passions well, honey!
Kisses all over....
Galaxy2
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