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Self Worth

You say you’re hurt,
That you’ve been slighted
Life cheated you,
And now you’ve decided

Worthless and used
Broken and bruised
Empty and viewed
Void
Of all things of value

Ugly resides
Not in your pride
But echoed
By chided furor

Deep inside
Your
“Who am I”
Begs from
YOU
The differ

The voice of
“Me”
Which longs to see
The other side of
The mirror

Look again
At
YOU
My friend
For Beauty Resides
Deep Inside
and
...Not...
In the eyes
Of
Others

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  • MelissaluvzSheila gold member
    December 8, 2009

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    This was a very deep piece! I didn't really like the ending to this piece. It was good though. But anyways. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


    • Gulfbreeze gold member
      December 8, 2009
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      Shielasbabygal

      Thank you for your comments, I appreciate, and would also like to understand what it is about the ending that bothers you. Thank you


  • AsIThink gold member
    November 7, 2008
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    Deeply insightful...

    I really enjoyed this; your rhyming is terrific and your meanings are well pronounced and impacting. This had a very inspirational feel to it and it offers reflective feedback and (it seems to me) valuable observations that don't lend themselves to self-service. Very good job with this.

    AsIThink...


    • Gulfbreeze gold member
      November 7, 2008
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      Deeply Insightful

      Thank you so very much for your thoughtful comments. ALways greatly appreciated.


  • Swangrnv gold member
    November 1, 2008
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    bravo!

    A great message here my friend! It seems that many (including myself) are afflicted with the 'self doubt' disease this piece here offers inspiration to maybe pick onesself up by the boot straps and take another look deeper inside to discover the good that just may be lurking somewhere inside..


  • DolceVito gold member
    October 30, 2008

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    Great write

    Creative write, enjoyable read.
    This is what I always say:

    Look again
    At
    YOU
    My friend
    For Beauty Resides
    Deep Inside
    and
    ...Not...
    In the eyes
    Of
    Others

    Good job,

    Vito

    • Gulfbreeze gold member
      October 30, 2008
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      Dolce Vito

      Thank you so very much, I really appreciate your comments

  • kev18
    October 25, 2008
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    10/10 :D

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