the smoke
Autumns' incense
rises from pyre heaps
pungent reminder of Summers
demise
the smoke
Autumns' incense
rises from pyre heaps
pungent reminder of Summers
demise
Author notes
Picture credit: autumn_fullsize_hootyani2.jpg by fairweatherlewis at Photobucket.com
The form is a Cinquain, a Cinquain is a five lined poem with a syllable distribution per line 2,4,6,8,2.
In a list
A contest entry
- Short poems about the Autumn Season by The Fun House.
950 points, ended November 2, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Absolutely fantastic! I can easily fall into the tone of this piece and dwell within the imagery it creates. Bravo!
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I really like the use of the word 'pungent' in this piece - very vivid and well crafted ... personally I don't think that 'summer' needs to be capitalised - but that is just a style thing
this is peaceful, touching, and a little on the melancholy side - I wish you the best of luck in the contest with this beautiful poem!
Keep writing
Polly
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