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the fall


i could taste
that silent taste of fall
as our october bodies broke.
i opened my memories,
like a book of substance,
and let the miracles escape.

how i wish you were here
dreamcatching by the water.
but the knowledge of my sin
is a black desert.
one evening i flew
escaping hollow skies, flying
to a non-existent god.
the passion of my wings
burning on the small sunset.

you let me change
like maple leaves, you let me fall.

Author notes

the small sunset
a book of substance
the miracles escape
one evening i want to fly
to a non-existing god
a silent taste of fall
knowledge of sin
a black desert
hollow skies
escape
wish you were here
dreamcatching
by the water
october bodies
break







i am very open to demolish this.
tell me how to make this better.
peace to all ~flight

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  • nancy drew
    October 31, 2008
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    so beautiful...

    helen~


  • girl shaman
    October 25, 2008

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    i am in total awe..
    this is surpurb!! oh my.. just.. lovley..
    i cannot even express in words. i know i sound totally idiotic at the moment but i do so enjoy the adoration and silent beauty in every line. thank you so much for entering


  • docbill gold member
    October 24, 2008
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    Very good! I can't see anything to change.