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I.
She sits alone
& reads.

And
cries.

just beyond the quilting circle.
she stares out the window & he
he stares at her.


she thinks of the travel writer
who asked if she’d be joining her in Morocco.


II.
we'd have been great friends - thought the
same, politically.
she brought that up,
not me - that would have been

unprofessional.


III.
he says that I’m a Matisse.

I have always been prettier
In his paintings

IV.
She smells him

 

where?     On her skin?

 

guilty.

 

V.

a cold shock from underneath

it enters   almost unnoticed
like
lengths of cobweb

a womb
slowly dropping

as if fingers draw her
in

she's
no stake in this
she's
untethered

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    December 26, 2008

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    A fly on the wall perception to this...the all-seeing eye of the heart that is able to stand outside an activity and evaluate it. Well done!!!!!! Awesome poetry.


  • Swan song gold member
    November 29, 2008

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    Your poetry is always sensual one way or another
    it celebrates it.
    I have missed it and the fault is mine

    You are a song that sings a differnt tune dear


  • Auburn Sunrise gold member
    November 18, 2008

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    Now this one got my attention!
    I love that last section... the descriptions there are fascinating and quite painful to read. So realistic.

    Those last four lines, however, take the cake, so to speak.

    They remind me of how I felt just after I had been left by my boyfriend, my lover, and my best friend/lover. Of course, it was my fault they all left and I completely deserved it - but I felt so hopeless and unattached - like a tree with no roots, like a balloon with no string, a ship with no sails or compass drifting along the swells of the ocean aimlessly.

    "untethered" is a great word


  • Grunts Girl silver member
    October 25, 2008
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    i loved the let loose at the end feeling
    and so many other places in meaning i went


  • tomisb
    October 24, 2008

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    Each picture ties the reader closer to the body. The words become hotter and hold tighter to the consciousness. At Matisse, I at last know how she looks and smells, but he is still a shadow, perhaps to be forgotten as she goes to melt like a box of crayons in the sun.

    Love, Tom B.

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