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Immortal

I am seized,
by frenzied energy.
Something I can't
control. Too strong.
Inspiration strikes me.

As I grab,
my gilded pen.
My heart begins
to fiercely pound.
Pen leaking soul.

Scribbling furiously away,
my anger, rage,
hate, sorrow and
pain take form.
Essence eternally preserved.

I bare all,
to those like
me, sheep of
the wayward flock.
They welcome me.

As I spread,
my soul around,
this place of
shattered dreams. My
life is forever.

As long as
my poems exist,
so too shall
a part of
me. Forever. Always.

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  • moonspirit
    October 27, 2008

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    glad you decided to write poetry

    you have in these lines, portrayed the necessity of poetry...and a glimpse into your soul..
    thanks for sharing


  • Mgreen
    October 24, 2008

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    This is wonderful ! "As I spread,
    my soul around,
    this place of
    shattered dreams. My
    life is forever." fav. line.

    very rememberable, your poetry will always be read


  • afullmetalwar
    October 24, 2008
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    it's good very good
    nice flow,
    nice lines,
    good use of words