I'll wash your underwear -skids and all
Pick you up when you can barely crawl
Give you my trust after countless lies
Not make fun of you when you start to cry
Carry your children, though they come ten pounds
Loan you a smile when you're given only frowns
I'll promise you forever based on the reality of now
So to you I commit, and I will honor my vows...
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A contest entry
- Wedding Vows by Riftkin.
900 points, ended October 31, 2008, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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favorite line
i'll promise you forever based on the reality of now
congrats on hon men
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truth in these words that is true. love your take on this.
best of luck to you
Riftkin
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different vows, not the typical romantic ones. I like this, it has a humourous side to it and the rhyme was fantastic. One of my favourite writes. Havnt read your work for a long time, but ive glad ive passed through. still talented as ever!
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WHAT? sometimes i read WAY too much into your works ... love ya!
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Yowser! This is quite the realist view. I like it.
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Great stuff...
Forthright honest vows that I would love to be a fly on the wall to hear should you ever deliver them in church... lol!
Really enjoyed this piece...
Well done!!!
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