You have a million little
butterflies bursting into more
in a stomach you feel
is no longer truly yours
You suffer from palpitations you
think will lead to a heart attack
your pulse races so much
it seems to back up that very fact
Your brain goes to mush
you no longer know your mind
and when you come to speak
you get totally tongue tied
You suffer from insomnia
you are sure you're going blind
now you find you're wearing
rose tinted glasses all the time
Your skin gets a constant
glowing rosy flush
you levitate everywhere a trick
you should never try to rush
As your spirit soars
twirling through the sky
it often pauses for a rest
on cloud number nine
You wish who has you smitten could
be fed to you via an intravenous drip
to calm down the effects of this
intoxicating chemically induced trip
When you are together the air
is so electrically charged
it's a wonder you don't combust
spontaneously within each others arms
Yet when you are apart
you are so full of mournful sighs
you're sure your heart will break
and that you're really going to die
You no longer have blood
rushing through your veins
it's something so powerful
your life will never be the same
It sees beyond the surface
is pure, compassionate, honest and true
it isn't constricting
but allows those involved to bloom and grow
Three words say it all
sometimes even they don't seem enough
don't worry it's not terminal
what you've done is fall in love
A contest entry
- Love by DreamerA.
750 points, ended November 9, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Live Laugh Love by Brilliant Blonde22.
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I liked it! it was interesting!
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Excellent
A wonderful creation. So very touching. Thank you for sharing.
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Thank you for reading, valued and appreciated
~sugar~
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Wonderful
What a great description of love's first appearance, when it runs you over like a freight train and there's nothing you can do but succumb. Good luck in the contest! Excellent write. -
Such feelings flow in flawless magic
Those times our bodies take control as our emotions river in soulful pleasures of the trueness of love.
Beautiful
Best wishes hun
Julie xx
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Thank you Julie for your lovely comment
valued and appreciated
~sugar~
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It has been a while hon. You have an amazing write here, the feelings, wants needs and emotions are all in this - this is exactly what it is like when we fall in love - sug, you have it bad. lol. I hope you are both doing well.
All the best
Emma
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It has been a while Emma, I hope you and yours are well.
Thank you so much for reading and commenting. Things
are going just great, thanks for asking and yes I have got
it bad. LOL!!!
Best wishes
~sugar~
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Different for you!
You are speaking in your own voice and relating your own thoughts. Its not romance or erotica; it is you describing the feeling of being in love. Evolution works in us all, keep stretching those horizons and growing.
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I have my moments..LOL!!! Thank you hon.
I honestly don't know whether I am coming or going at the moment, a constant roller coaster ride.
Value and appreciate you reading.
Love ~sweetness~ xxx
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Wonderful Description of True Love
And there, in a nutshell, is what love is all about. You have described it to a 'T' Sugar. Brilliant imagery here, and wonderful feelings of how love is certainly like a drug, in which you need that person who you have fallen for, on a constant drip. Hahaha. Wonderful writing Sugar. Good luck with this piece, although I am sure it does not need it.
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Hahahahah...How would i know all this aye???
< leave alone LMAO! Thank you baby, for reading and commenting, it is certainly like a drug, and an IV drip would go down a treat. It is good to see you on here hon. Always a pleasure, valued and appreciated.
Darkest Love
always Chelle xxx
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Wow
Really liked the details and descriptions you use, plus the ideas you included really make this poem stand out. Thanks for entering and good luck xx -
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Glad you enjoyed this.
Value and appreciate you reading,
~sugar~
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This is a beautiful write. The part of the brain going to mush, can so relate to that. I find I always tend to act like a total idiot whenever I like a guy. I don't know why, but I find I can talk more easily to guys I don't have crushes on and can hardly talk at all to guys that I do have crushes on. Either that or what happens is my brain turns to mush and I end up saying stupid things that I end up regretting. Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.
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Thank you for reading and commenting. Truly valued and appreciated.
I find that is always the case, guys that are mates you can chat to your hearts connent with, as soon as you fancy someone, your brain seems to pack in and you either can't speak at all, or all that comes out is gibberish.
Glad you enjoyed this
~sugar~
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