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A Quick Shower

whispering in tinny clicks and rattles,
the chains gossip amongst themselves
as I work the winch,
raising you by all four limbs
toward the ceiling.
hooded, gagged, blinded,
stripped of clothing
and identity,
it dangles helpless and exposed
above my head.
cold and gleaming,
the knife slides free of its tooled leather sheath,
hissing anticipation.
pausing, I run my thumb
against the smooth hilt,
savoring the moment before
the storm breaks.
then, my arm becomes a rattlesnake,
shaking in warning before striking upward
with one bared steel fang,
slashing across my suspended playmate's
bare torso.
humming a Slayer song,
I set the knife down on the soap-dish,
and ran my hands over myself,
rubbing in my
fresh-harvested shampoo.

I love to masturbate
in the shower.

(doesn't everyone?)

Author notes

4 and 6 both contributed heavily to this. The song being hummed is also a large inspiration -- Slayer's "Seasons in the Abyss". I also drew on Dead Skin Mask. Option 6.

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Comments

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  • Ich schreie schreie
    January 15
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    thsi was exactly what I was searching for.

    Thank you for appropriating my current request for blood...


  • realism-vs-romance
    November 2, 2008

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    This piece was very interesting.

    I certainly wasnt expecting to read something like this.

    Thanks for entering and good luck!

    • intoothandclaw
      November 2, 2008
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      Also, fixed the AN, sorry.

    • intoothandclaw
      November 2, 2008
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      I had a very hard time choosing what to enter. I might have other pieces which are more appropriate/what you were looking for.. dunno. Thanks.


  • November-Dani
    October 24, 2008

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    Twisted, and i love it. This is just awesome work, "fresh-harvested shampoo", how on earth did you come up with that? Haha fantastic work. thanks for entering.
    Dani.

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