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Silent Screams

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She walks amongst sinners and murderers alike 

those who kill for the pleasure of death in the night.

Fearlessly going where others would never venture,

they can't harm her more than her own inner tension.

 

She has long since learnt that the true horror of life 

are the demons that dwell in unquiet, frenzied minds.

She battles these demons each and every day

as they try endlessly to take her sanity away.

 

Nothing compares to what haunts her scarred, weary self 

with their words that are shouted but not said aloud,

that scurry and seek to crawl out of her normal facade 

to glimpse the light of day and reveal their disquiet.

 

Her demons shriek and scream for their final release 

they want to show others the tortured nature of the beast.

Next time you got out, watch others and you will see 

that behind their calm faces, they are riddled with unease. 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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artist credit: http://tomabw.deviantart.com/art/Suspention-point-99961344

~ my inner disturbia ~

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  • a good poem, dark and twisting with the lines, anguish and pain flowing throuhg - thanks for entering.

  • Marvelous work here. We can many times be our own worst enemy, the quiet battle that rages behind our eyes, hidden to the outsiders. Seeing the opinions of others, their guarded glances and disapproving stares need no words. I wonder if they realize they have their own war raging within?
    good luck in the contest
    Peace

  • Powerful...

    Profound in its truth...
    Honest & heartfelt with an emotional depth that is staggering...
    I love poetry that makes me feel & this did...
    Keep up the good work...
    Well done!!!


  • pinksnowboots
    February 14
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    I really like the words but the use of ellipses bothers me. Thanks for entering!


  • Luciferschild
    February 9

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    the stanzas are very well thought out and express their ideas clearly. thank you for entering and good luck


  • stars-
    January 28

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    i dont have enough or the right words to give you a comment worthy of this work of art in front of me. amazing!


  • Vaquerita
    January 17

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    i am not sure about your perspective

    this is an interesting poem but i think "she have long since learnt that the horror of life" should say "she has long since learned that the horrors of life"

    i wouldn't have mentioned it except that this is a cool poem and i thought you would like to know because this part is confusing as it it is written...and wrong.


    • Mariana gold member
      January 27
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      Thank you so much for letting me know about the grammatical error. Sometimes we can read things we write over and over and never see the wood for the trees. I appreciate your input!


  • insideinsanity
    January 1

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    What a picture! I had to stop and stare at that for a moment, completely unearthed me in it's strangeness. But I liiiike it.

    It's interesting to see how personal demons (from what I read out of it) are some of the most vivid disturbances in our real minds. Interesting. Seems darker than it appears, at first read, too.

    Overall, I must say it's a nice write.

    Thank you for entering!

  • Fritz O skennick gold member
    December 31, 2008
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    Fantastic!!!

    And so very worthy of the Gold shiny you're sporting there...
    First off, fantastic pic to draw from...
    The piece... Awesome!!!
    Dark, powerful & profound in its truth...
    Captivating narrative with a seamless flow that made for a compelling read...
    Well penned, well versed, well done!!!


  • Ebbing.X.Discreetly
    December 26, 2008

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    ~OMG! Fantastic poem and exactly the kind of poem I was looking for for my contest. The metaphor of the demons is simply amazing and I loved it from beginning to end. I can really relate to this piece and agree with all you said. Thanks so much for entering and keep up the spectacular work.
    ~Very good use of language.
    ~My favourite parts were the following:

    fearlessly going where others would never venture
    they can't harm him more than his own inner tension

    he has long since learnt that the true horror of life
    are the demons that dwell in unquiet, frenzied minds
    he battles these demons each and every day
    as they endlessly try to take his sanity away

    next time you got out...watch others and you will see

    that behind their calm faces...they are riddled with unease
    ~Also, I found that the fact that you used dark elements was really appropriate and went well with what you said. =]


  • whispernthedark Greeters member
    October 25, 2008

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    well i guess i will be dumb and have to say... there are nothing but pics here, no text so i have no idea what you have written... thanks for gracing my contest with this entry, but i can't consider it.


    whisper

    • Mariana gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Hello whispernthedark

      I am so sorry you couldn't see the words to this poem. It has happened once before.
      I apologise for wasting your time...it's a pity you never got a chance to read it.
      Thanks anyway for trying


  • Pisces rainbow gold member
    October 25, 2008

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    brilliant
    unique vocabulary
    YOU TOOK THE WORDS RIGHT OUT OF MY HEAD!
    God bless you MY FRIEN


  • Super-man
    October 25, 2008

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    Awesome.

    Wow, its like you are writing from MY head.
    Yes I did read it.

    Unbeleivable.

    Stunning work

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