i would cry if you died,
dont commit suicide,
i dont want you to die,
ur my alaby..
for living this life.
why would you want to die?
im your life line ...
dont do this to me ..
my love will never die...
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you overuse the word "die". i understand the poem is about death but you really and seriously overuse the word "die" and it seems a little too matchy rythmie.
a little too emo. a little too fake. it seems as thought you are trying to be deep and emotional a little too hard. infact it seems like you are trying waaaay too hard. "i would cry if you died, dont commit suicide" of course you would cry. you dont hate the person, do you? it seriously and really seems like your trying to hard to be emo. especially how on your page it even says "im really emo". i had so scroll down forever to get to your poems and it seems like these ones are trying too hard to be emo as well. and emo kids dont ADMIT they are emo!
ahhh! this kills me!
ooooooh and i hate it when people use "ur" in poems. it isnt an instant message on AIM ITS A POEM! AHHH!!! my friends do that too and it drives me CRAZY! UGHHH! where did all of the literature from edgar allen poe go, and why does no one compare poetry to him anymore?
http://allpoetry.com/item/show/4794397?ok=1
i didnt write that but its amazing.
thats what a poem SHOULD be.
ughhhahhh!
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thanks for that reallt long saying about the whole emo thing. i believe that you go to the extreme of reading the poems of ppl and just telling them that they r 2 emo...wtf, dont read a poem if your just gonna say someone is "to emo"
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its really good. XD
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thanks for your comment,at least someone cares
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ur very welcome.
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O.O....wows....
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thanks
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awsome!
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thanks
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awww whos gna die hun?
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no one,its just something that almost happened...
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oh good
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