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Dark Haiku #23

Obcessing all night
I am so in love with her
Yearning hurts so much


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  • individuality gold member
    May 27

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    ah that is the nature of love, it brigs you intense pleasure then swirls it around the aches and pains of longing. a good poem.


  • Draig aine gold member
    March 29
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    pure Fritz

    your words vibrate alive


  • Samplette gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    Yearning can hurt very deeply that's for sure. A good piece. I think you should leave the punctuation out, but other than that a good write. Thank you for entering.
    Sam


  • LadyDementia gold member
    October 27, 2008

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    You got that right! Wanting and longing for something or someone can be painful! A very well expressed verse, good luck in your contest

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    October 24, 2008
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  • Freak-in-BlackJeans
    October 24, 2008

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    This is so pretty!!!!
    I have no words for this.

    Good luck in the contest!!

    Naoto

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