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by autumn's embrace
death can be magnificent
and prayer unanswered.
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A contest entry
- Short poems about the Autumn Season by The Fun House.
950 points, ended November 2, 2008, 38 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
A Haiku.
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You don't often see Haiku's as thoughtful as this, more often than not they are lighthearted, playful, so the thought invested in this one gives it a refreshing power.
Good write.
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I'm not sure if you meant "a" prayer or "and" prayer in this one; but either way the poem works and is absolutely grand. I love the profound thought behind it. Well done
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Thank You.
I have always found that prayers are spoken in times we see and know death is close, and as I looked out my window when writing this I saw three leaves still clinging to a tree, thinking to myself how our prayers to remain will in the end go unanswered....
so yes, imho, I think it should be "and prayer unanswered", or "and prayers unanswered", but either way, I am both happy you enjoyed it, and *saw*, what I was trying to convey...
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this really leaves you wanting more
like maybe an answered prayer for instance
nicely succinct
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This is so simple.
And yet, in these few words you've said so much.
Beautiful!
Good luck in the contest!
Naoto
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