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Trickle down

Misdirection
I've lost my soul
No where to turn
No where to go
I fade
I decay
Praying it will go away
All I needed was an
"are you okay"
Life falling to pieces
Like a broken mirror
I've tied the knot
Ready to kill my fear
Emptiness devouring me from within
Falsified hopes patched with sin
Smiling and pretending
Is leading to this ending
How could I ever be
What you wanted to see
Pushing me away
Cause it's not okay
I'll do this to save all of you
You don't want to know what I was gonna do
Once again I stumble and fall
Walking to the edge
Ready to end it all
I'd say goodbye
But would you even ask why
So remember my tears
As I start to cry
Tommorow will never come again
And today was just today
So now is my time
I have nothing more to say

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  • eviscerated
    December 6, 2008

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    I really like your fourteenth and fifteenth lines: "Emptiness devouring me from within / Falsified hopes patched with sin." I think "devoured" was the perfect word to use.