I知 sick of writing about you
The same old boring poems
scribbled angrily on
matted pulp
I知 sick of crying over you
Tears bled
by self-induced pain
dehydrates my heart
I知 sick of going back to you
Not this time --
my imbalance will now
embrace the slandered
security of solitude
I知 sick of being without you
Please baby --
hurt me once more
for old time痴 sake
In a list
A contest entry
- What Are You Feeling Inside? by Heavens Child.
550 points, ended October 28, 2008, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
1 - 12 of 12
-
Wonderful
Very creative and so well done. Such a great expression. Best of luck in the contest
-
I think most of us would rather stay in the pain we know and are used to, then let ourselves be vulnerable to something new. Change is soooo hard. I like the 'realness' of your writing. Best wishes and thank you for entering.
-
I would just like to go on record by saying that's twisted. I understand that way of thinking but it's more or less just having to let go of what's in the end bad for you. As opposed to holding on to all of the good times you had.
-
-
hey u! thanks for the comment. came on yahoo today, didnt see u. will be home in a few hours, last minute crap. ttyl
-
-
WOW...I know this feeling so damned well. We are a sick society in our thinking aren't we?
A Brillant write that I found much appreciation for.
Shelly
-
-
hey thanks for checking it out. yeah i do believe we are a sick society at times, but damn, why does it feel so normal? lol thanks for reading, the time it took you to read this made me feel really good. thanks so much
-
-
because we've gotten used to the pain...that's why it feels so normal. That's what happens when the real does come along and it is so perfect we create chaos just to mix it up a little to feel normal. It's a viscious cycle. I really enjoy your work...I've added you as a fav. and look forward to reding more.
Shelly -
-
well that is me in every meaning. wow, have i been so corrupted? hmmm, u just inspired something else in me, thanks so much. im glad we crossed paths
-
-
as am I...(BIG SMILE)
-
-
-
-
-
I've felt like this a few times...it's hell, and hell is repeating the same old bullshit for the same old reasons. It's never moving forward towards warmth, just stuck in gray cement and bubblegum. The reason why I love what you write is because it's as if you are here in front of me, telling me like it is. THAT is the key to connecting
Love, Lane
-
I just love your stuff, you take emotions I always over describe and make them succinct and to the point. Sometimes I feel you are writing from my heart
When I read your writes I feel I have gotten something off my chest. This one is no different. It is wonderful and not boring and continuously brilliant. You manage to fit so much into so few words.
Love this part,
"Not this time --
my imbalance will now
embrace the slandered
security of solitude"
And also the ending
"Please baby --
hurt me once more
for old time’s sake"
Wonderfully penned.
Kelly
-
-
thats so kind of you. im glad u can relate to what im saying in your own way, or even understand it for that matter lol. thanks so much for taking time out your day to read, and comment. thanks so much
-
Adding your comment:
1 - 12 of 12
