Nothing to hold me
Nothing to grab
Beliefs?..nevermind them
Love?..Deceitful
Friends?..arrogant
Roll the dice
Lets see what we get
Lets free fall
See if we land
Remember when I told you
you were my reason?
Remember when you loved me?
or was that my imagination?
What are we now?
and if we are then
why are we now?
Questions..
wheres my answer?
I'm free falling
into nothing
falling..falling..
nothing to hold me
nothing to grab
I'm free falling
never to land
Author notes
Lies, love, doubt and risk is what you could say the poem is about and it all came to an end so now I fall.
A contest entry
- I don't know what to think anymore. by ninja girl 418.
850 points, ended December 30, 2008, 46 entries
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Wow, such sadness!
Great job, the emotions invoked in this piece are so strong. Bravo!
♥ Kate -
Wish I had been there to catch you
Wish I had been there to hold you
Wish I had been there to tell you it would be alright
But I wasn't, I'm sorry...
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i really like this, especially the first stanza, with the questions and answers. the format works well, and the topic so identifiable. i love your username, by the way, mcr is a WAY of life, and it's the one I follow.
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I love this. The repeatitiveness of falling just adds to the amazingness of it. The way you ask the questions in the poem and the structure is great. Great write hun! And I'm always here for you, no matter what. Love you! Just don't fall to far, I don't want to loose you.
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this is really good ! i feel your pain . sometimes its okay to fall, but after a certain point, you are the only person who can pick yourself up and move on
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