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the taste of love.


the vampiress without a soul,
found a demon,
a hand to hold.

the demon knows
he's found his girl,
who can love him forever and give him the world.

but they live in separate worlds,

the demon and the vampire girl,

they'll never touch, never meet,

but oh, the taste of love is sweet.

 

she'll wait forever to hear his voice,

she knows she doesn't have a choice.

he has her heart forever.

 

he will always be there for her,

and keep her safe from the dark,

she belongs in his heart.

 

she belongs to her demon,

and he belongs to his vampire girl.

they made each other their world.

 

but they live so far away.

they live in vastly different worlds,

the demon and the vampire girl,

they'll never touch, never meet,

but oh, the taste of love is sweet.

 

 



 

Author notes

origionally written for someone i gave my heart to, but that was before they broke it.

opiton 5,6, maybe 7. i dont know....did it make you feel?

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Comments


  • FightOffYourDemons
    November 10, 2008

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    Heh, trying to find as many categories as you can?
    It's all good.

    Yeah I can kinda feel it.
    There seems to be feeling behind this story.
    Good write. I just have to question you on the rhyme. I don;t know if i am missing how it's suppose to go or if you just hodge-podged it or what?
    Get back to me?

    Good luck, Nikki


  • spirit rising
    November 4, 2008

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    this is a beautiful love story from the world of super natural beings, i really enjoyed reading this, thanks for sharing. x


  • Ativan
    October 30, 2008

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    Wow, this is the third poem dealing with relationships. I just want to say that you are only 14 and heartache will come. It is a part of maturity. I hope you two remain together forever. But 14- 20 is the age where you change drastically and become different people. I still wish you the best with the relationship. Please just don't become obsessed.

    I really liked the poem. It was unusual with a common message but the uniqueness you added with the vampire made it really interesting. Keep writing and keep up the work. Take my comments with ease. I am only trying to be helpful. Wish you the best in the contest.