I was standing on the balcony one starry summer night
My scope fixed on the golden moon so big and all so bright
The air was warm – the night was calm and I was so at ease
When something floated by me there upon the gentle breeze
I did not see the moving wings as it glided in the night
Just a silhouette was in my scope that gave me quite a fright
I moved my eyes to gaze above – I heard no single sound
The thing that moved within my view flew close and settled down
I raised my head to look at it – it turned and looked at me
I smiled and sighed and thought out loud – how foolish I could be
The silhouette I saw come in - that flew across my sight
Was just a lonely barn owl in the clutches of the night
He sat there for a moment as he gazed down at me there
Then suddenly he took to flight – no sound to break the air
And I was left alone once more in the bright and silent light
Just the moon and me and the sky above this starry summer night
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I'm thinking you are writing from little snippets from real life, things that truly happened. Am I right?
This is so plain and down to earth that it is far more interesting than fantasy or fiction.
I truly loved this!
John
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Thank you. You are absolutely right. Most of my poems i take from real life, or what other people tell me. This one was when i was out gazing at the moon with my scope. I was so fascinated with the owl because he was so silent...and so big! When he took off, there was not a sound, yet people say they hear their wings. I heard nothing.
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First of all: what a beautiful background! it's so fitting! And isnt it amazing those things that go "bump" in the night how minorial those usually are...
Keep up the good work
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I loved the rhyme and imagery..Opening ones own eyes, is important for all to see....excellent... i really enjoyed.!
becca
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nice poem
nice poem had good flow and it had a bit suspense as one waited to see what was in her sights.well writen.sounds fine to me.why revisie it.i'll book mark this and add you as a favorite,ill come back and read more it's late here.it's 2 in the morn and i have to do dialysis.but i'll be back again.
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This does bring an aire of peace and tranquility with it. To be with one as Mother Nature shares the delights of a quiet night, and the sign of a visiting wise owl has brought out the delights of that remembered night.
Simply outstanding write, with perfect imagery created and the flow of the story keeps you bound till the end. Well done and thank you for sharing such a beautiful moment of reflection. One we can all relate to so easily when given the chance to open our eyes to what is there. Brilliant.
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A very fine write, indeed. Imagery; rhythm and rhyme are just fine. Thanks for sharing this one with us.
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A terriffic poem here, flow ,imagery,rhyme and rhythm all top notch. A lovely story told simply and well. Congratulations.
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Wonderful Imagery !
I really enjoyed your poem and don't think it needs any improvement at all
Well penned indeed 
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Lovely piece...
...well-crafted and deserving more than just one read (I wll reread this when I need inspiration)
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Thanks mate! I appreciate your comments very much.
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You are so good at rhyme and telling a story. I see nothing to change. Its very good..
I built my scope, i love it.
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Thanks, mate! I appreciate your reading. You built a scope? How'd you do that? I bought mine years ago.
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