Heart and soul entangled by thorns
of a blackened rose that weeps
with tears of blood, staining its green
leaves a crimson red.
Pain, sorrow, the emptiness of existence.
Nowhere to go, no one to hold, to see,
to love. Alone for all eternity, not alive
and not dead, but faintly in-between.
Colour and sound cascade through me
like the angel of death, tearing away at
my very being. Pieces of myself forever
lost to the darkness of despair.
Years, centuries, all is the same. It
passes by me, through me, one moment
merged with the next. No form, no sequence,
no nothing. Random, confusing, endless.
One cycle begins and another ends, like chains
unto the soul. Each a moment in time, an
experience in life. Thorns of my life show now,
no chain of life, no existence, just never ending
eternity.
In a list
A contest entry
- birth of love by rosepoet.
400 points, ended November 19, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Ah, the finality of eternity. I enjoyed this write very much. You did well. Very well
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Very well done
I like it,it captured me it pulled me aside and i demanded my attention, well thought of well strung together created with exquised talent good work. -
wow is all I can say....held my attention through to the very last word. Great write!! Keep up the good work hun!
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Wow, I liked this one the best n I'm not just returning the compliment N u really writing a novel, wonder if that day will ever come for me!!!
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A nicely done dark piece of poetry here, the sadness of eternal living torment in the current world, again, deftly put together! bravo...
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I'm so happy you liked it - this is one of my first and one of my fav poets. Thanks for review :3
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i think this is amazing, i mean i was just knocked on my butt with my jaw on the floor, keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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Thank you - I really liked this one too :3
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