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Mix-Matched Socks In The Olympics


   A shooting star made of four-leaf clovers     
   Crashes at the end of a rainbow     
   The explosion leaves a pot of golden elixir     
   A potion that provides immortality     
   My senseless wandering brings me upon it     
   I rejoice and drink, and share it with you     
   Now we will both live forever together     
   And spend eternity exploring the world (and each other)     


          "Till death do us part"         
           Will just make us laugh        


   I'll come across a black cat with glowing eyes     
   While walking under an abandoned ladder     
   On the 13th Friday of October at dusk     
   But you'll stay by my side through it all     
   Even as storm clouds gather above me     
   You'll shield me from lightning till the day I am dead     
   Despite the fact I made an ugly face     
   At some time when the wind's direction changed     


          A hundred lifetimes of the worst bad luck         
          Would not be enough to bring us unstuck         


   You'll watch from the sidelines as I practise my tennis     
   Joking about how you could kick my butt     
   And teasing me about looking so hot in shorts     
   (Even though we both know it's not true)     
   I'll sit with you as you play the piano     
   Head on your shoulder, arm 'round your back     
   Singing along, so horribly out of tune     
   Then we'll turn on the radio and dance 'round the room     


          We'll fall onto the couch in a total tangled mess         
          Of passion and tennis shorts; one thing leads to the next         


   We'll go to the park, ignoring the forecast     
   And you'll 'forget' to bring your coat     
   So when the rain pours down, we'll share mine     
   While huddling under our initial-engraved tree     
   As rainbow-filtering droplets fall from glistening leaves     
   Soaking your skin-tight shirt and ruining my straightened hair     
   Which you'll run your fingers through as you squash me against the tree     
   Because cuddling is an extreme sport, and we are both olympic athletes     


          Any rain, any storm, any cyclone is fine         
          As long as you're with me, as long as you're mine         

          You'll always think that I'm your perfect catch         
          Even though we [ like my socks ] do not match         

 

Author notes

LOL =)
This is for the Love, Love, Love contest.
I'm really not sure whether you'll like it or not.. but.. thought I'd give it a try anyhow.

Thoughts, anyone ?
Thanks for reading

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Comments

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  • vampedvixen
    December 5, 2008

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    I love this poem. Everything from the structure of it to the way you work in the words works brilliantly. Congratulations on penning a wonderful poem!

  • luvdrkchocolate
    November 10, 2008

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    Oh. This is a very cute poem that you have going on here. At first when I was reading this I was thinking it was about vampire love because you were talking about forever and dying being funny but I think that's not what you meant. I like the lines about mismatched socks. That was a really great image. You did a good job of expressing yourself here.


    • KyleBerg gold member
      November 11, 2008
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      Lol, no.. vampires aren't quite my thing
      Interesting interpretation
      Thank you for the lovely comment


  • acari27 gold member
    November 3, 2008
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    great


  • Aimee Hill
    October 31, 2008

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    I truly enjoyed how you captured the love between the two. I like how you gave them life... like real people... Joking around, having fun, teasing eachother, and having those romantic moments. Definately cuddle worthy.

    Excellent job with this one, the flow, the words, wonderful. Very easy to read and keep my interest. I was waiting to see what they would be up to next. Good use of words to paint a picture for us. Thank you for sharing!!


    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 31, 2008
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      oh wow! cuddle worthy??
      Nicest compliment ever
      Thanks for reading, I'm so glad you liked it =)


      • Aimee Hill
        November 1, 2008
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        Definately cuddle worthy
        You're welcome, I enjoyed it a great deal!!


  • duana
    October 26, 2008
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    nice first stanza. well written.


  • Wandering Woodchuck silver member
    October 26, 2008

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    I liked it alot. I thought that the little moments that are shared between the two were well described and show true love. Great job.

    Mike


    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      It's nice that you like it.
      Thanks for the kind comment. =)


  • hawkeslake gold member
    October 26, 2008

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    Hey, I'm a sucker for "Dancing in the Rain" type poems, especially where "cuddling is an extreme sport" and the protagonists are Olympians! What's not to love! A great and fun read.

    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 26, 2008
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      Haha awesome! =)
      That was my favourite line.. one of those lines that just makes you smile when you think of it
      Thanks for the wonderful comment


  • Wolven Roses
    October 25, 2008
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    very nice. great emotion, and good expression. thanks


  • Tyl3r
    October 24, 2008
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    That's freakin' sweet, dude. I'm gonna bookmark this.
    Bravo, my friend, bravo.


    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 24, 2008
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      Bookmark?
      Awesome!
      Your comment made me smile
      Thank you. =)

  • Cloudwatcher
    October 24, 2008

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    Love it

    I like the way this one shows togetherness and such understanding within a relationship that comes with freedom for each to be who they are.


    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 24, 2008
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      Thank you for the lovely comment
      Glad you liked it =)


  • lilhatefulcat
    October 24, 2008

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    this is a lovely poem!, you succeed in being bright...something quite hard for you. so i'm 'xited that you can do it...cheer up mate!


  • Edited
    October 24, 2008

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    it really cool. it flows and gives you a fuzzy feeling.
    well done on this write and all the best for your future and in this contest.
    keep up the good work


    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 24, 2008
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      =) That fuzzy feeling was what i was aiming for.
      Thanks for your kind comment


  • Xx.Toxic.xX
    October 24, 2008

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    wow. this was an extremely amazing poem. i like the last line.XD. (psst.....my socks dont match either. it's ok,though. don't feel bad.)

    • KyleBerg gold member
      October 24, 2008
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      Haha!
      I wore odd socks on purpose ONCE, just ONCE, and ever since i can almost never find a matching pair

      I like it though, makes me feel.. unique =)

      I am glad you liked that line.. it took me a long time to get it how i wanted it

      Thanks for the kind comment

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